Comments | rayne_shippers: Fic: "Borne." Rated PG.

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Fic: "Borne." Rated PG.

Nov 07, 2008 00:16

Title: Borne
Author: an_ardent_rain
Rating: PG
Word Count: 1377
Disclaimer: Not mine.
-Author Note: Well, I didn't get to the October Challenge, but the fic I'd planned to do for that is still in the works. In the meantime... This! It's... I don't know. I probably need to go back and look through it. Constructive criticism would be appreciated. Hope you ( Read more... )

2008: genre - friendshippy, 2008: fanfic (1000+ words), 2008: genre - pre-rayne

Comments 16

idyllictorture November 7 2008, 08:26:37 UTC

I liked this. I thought it was a nice character piece.

an_ardent_rain November 7 2008, 14:21:04 UTC

Thank you very much! :) Yes, I think that's a nice description for it - hee. I really appreciate the comment!

hologramx November 7 2008, 11:40:00 UTC

Intense but pretty sweet! Realistic, too.

Um, just couldn't quite understand this line:
...and she wouldn't why, with vessels so large, he couldn't take in all that she was saying.

an_ardent_rain November 7 2008, 14:24:59 UTC

Thanks so much! I was really going for realistic, especially in terms of their actual interactions. I love me some Rayne, but I love to explore the beginnings of any sort of relationship more than anything else.

Oh, and that was a misstype. Supposed to be wondered instead of wouldn't - thanks for pointing that out! I went back and fixed it.

gilove2dance November 7 2008, 11:52:03 UTC

Wow....very nice. How you are so amazing at imagery? Like the scream tearing from her throat...man oh man.

an_ardent_rain November 7 2008, 20:32:31 UTC

Thank you very much! *laughs* Really, I can do imagery and all that stuff because that's the way I see the world. I'm not insane, clearly, but I have a very visual mind and a crazy-vivid imagination. Heh. Sometimes I worry that I'm a little too surreal (huzzah for River-voice, which can't be too surreal - heh heh heh).

Anyway! Thanks so much for the comment! And the compliment! Amazing? Aww shucks... Hee. Always makes little ol' me so very happy to hear stuff like that. I'm very glad you enjoyed it! :)

pladbelle_87 November 7 2008, 12:31:49 UTC

Oh so very nice. I love your stories very much, hun! This one wa great! =D

an_ardent_rain November 7 2008, 20:37:02 UTC

Thanks so much! Wow, yay - someone loves my stories! *beam* Hee. That makes me feel all fuzzly and pleased. I'm so glad you enjoyed! I do love writing them. And thanks for leaving a comment - always appreciated! :)

little_dumpling November 7 2008, 17:43:02 UTC

hmmm, i quite liked it too. it was definitely something, but i don't think i could put my finger on what it was either.

i do like the interaction though, they felt very real. :]

an_ardent_rain November 7 2008, 21:30:56 UTC

Heh - thank you for the comment! Yeah, it's just... heh. I was listening to some music and I just got inspired, I guess!

I'm so glad it felt real! That was exactly what I was going for; I wanted to write the two of them in a non-romantic but still hinting at an undercurrent sort of way, but as in-character and all that as I could. So glad it worked!

Thanks again! Always appreciate it. ^_^