Fic: Dualism

[ravenclaw42]

First off, a disclaimer: I swear on a stack of holy books of your choice that I DID NOT KNOW THIS EXISTED until last night. My only explanation... um... Great minds think alike? Its title is "Stranger Things Have Happened" and, er, this is proof? *nervous* Officer, I've never seen this porn before in my life. *bows in confused misery

Comments

[ynm]

Woah...just woah. You absolutely have to write a sequel to this. Or something else. Anything as long as there's IchiIshi in it.

[ravenclaw42]

Thanks! IchiIshi seems to work its way into anything and everything I write now, so no worries about that. ^_^

[whitedestiny1x2]

Usually in my comments, I'll pick out sentences that I really, really love and squee like mad over them. But . . . I can't with this one because my comment would be longer than your fic! Seriously. Every sentence is well written, thoughtful; your whole fic would be italicized in my comment. XDDDDDD

The imagery is gorgeous and the word choice is perfect. I especially love the description of Ichigo's raw power, the lake, sealing the zanpaktou, Ichigo and Ishida's argument, Ichigo's hair, lalalala I can keep going . . . see, this is what I'm talking about. I SERIOUSLY LOVE EVERYTHING! Gahh. *1000+ thumbs up*

Mmm, there is one obvious error that I saw: "He felt the feathery touches of willow branches ghosting his hair this way and that, and the sound of Ichigo’s footsteps changed as he hit a the covering of first-fallen leaves under the tree." Yea, really picky of me to point that out. *slaps self

[ravenclaw42]

Thank you very much for the wonderful comment! ^_^

Hah, and on the subject of the typos and remnants, I read back through the story after I read this comment and saw way more than just that one. XD I need to go back through and polish the whole thing, but at least it wasn't that noticable. ^_^. Thanks for pointing it out!

I don't know if that specific omake is going to happen, but I'm sure there's going to be more IchiIshi in the future. They've taken over my braaaiiin. >_<

Thanks again! ^_^

[yma2]

I may have to comment on this twice, because I think I might need to give this a second reading to give you proper feedback

[ravenclaw42]

Thanks!! You know I always love your page-long comments. ^_^

Ishida is so utterly, utterly revenge driven.
Entirely true. I think it goes a little further than that, too, in that he lets himself be revenge-driven because he doesn't want to consider the more complicated, more difficult path he could take -- continuing his Sensei's life's work. He thinks if he just focuses his anger on revenge instead of trying to eradicate his anger and cooperate with/get close to other people, he won't get hurt. And that choice is what proves Ishida's youth and naivety, which is a lovely little counterpoint to his academic genius and older-than-his-years attitude.

Ichigo is a protector, but how can he protect anyone against himself?I love that. (I think that sentence may actually be my jumping-off point for the NEXT sequel. Hahaha it never ends! XD) Your comments about power are dead-on. All of Bleach is about power, really, not just in the "can he level up to beat the next boss in time?" sort of way (although that has its moments, *

[yma2]

I like page-long comments to. I'm trying to force myself to write them more, and you're stuff is generally good enough I find pleanty to say.
He thinks if he just focuses his anger on revenge instead of trying to eradicate his anger and cooperate with/get close to other people, he won't get hurt. And that choice is what proves Ishida's youth and naivety, which is a lovely little counterpoint to his academic genius and older-than-his-years attitude.I'd never, ever thought of him like that. I must admit... I like it. I think he's also trying very had to live up to something, almost a super-hero ideaology. It shows how utterly geeky, yet utterly loverble he is too. I think I remember seeing Ishida described somewhere as 'a dork trying increadibly hard to be cool.' And I think that's very true. He's really quite an interesting guy and I do so love him, squishy little Quincy

[sublimeparadigm]

ooooh, this is so good! Such a perfect balance of emotion and insight. It's such a delight to see my favorite pairing written *just* how I like them. :3

[ravenclaw42]

Thank you!! ^_^

[ravenclaw42]

Aw. *blush* Thank you! ^_^ It's all thanks to the boys for pestering me until I sucked it up and rewrote the part that got lost. XD