Kiss #5: Droplet

[ran_mouri82]

Title: Droplet
Author: ran_mouri82
Pairing: Kudou Shin'ichi and Mouri Ran
Fandom: Detective Conan
Theme: #29 - the sound of waves
Rating: G
Disclaimer: Detective Conan is pwned by Aoyama Gosho. I only admire his l33t skillz.

Comments

[insaneladybug]

Beautiful! You know, I think this is my favorite piece of yours so far. We need to see Ran like this. Usually on the show/in the manga, she's more of a cookie-cutter character, the way she always seems to blindly wait for Shinichi and to accept those phone calls of his without much thought. If I was her, man, I would have been so mad to get outside after the bomb scare in movie #1, only to be told that he'd left again, not even waiting to see if she was alright.

I adore her reminisces about playing with Shinichi. LOL. That gives such a cute mental image, as does chibi Ran chasing raindrops down the window while Kogoro scolds her.

Overall, this is a very well-written, powerful piece. The last two lines, I think, are my favorites. Very poignant!

BTW, thanks for your message. ^^ **hugs.** Just as a note, you may like the fic I put up Saturday. Akemi has quite a large role.

[ran_mouri82]

*tackles glomps u* ^_________________

[candy__chan]

That was beautiful. I loved the symbolism and the whole idea of her crying with the rain, and the last lines just WIN ♥♥♥

...and I agree with ladybug-chan. I love and adore Ran, and her loyalty is extremely admirable, but at the same time...the girl really needs to tell Shinichi what's what. Granted, not much he can really do about it, but GAWD! I was proud of her in movie eight for chewing his ass over the radio thing! ...which leads into the "I love you, Shinichi...hey look! Shiny things!" *froths at the mouth*

Also, your disclaimer wins the interwebs :D

[ran_mouri82]

*squeals and glomps* Thankyouthankyouthankyou! I was going for poetic angst without the cheese! *nods sagely*

Somehow, I'm sure Ran has an idea that Shin'ichi can't exactly come home and can't exactly tell her why. After all, she was so perceptive each time she suspected Conan's true identity: a drug must've made him small and he must be hiding out from bad guys. And despite the fact that she would almost love to believe Conan WAS Shin'ichi, that didn't stop her from preparing to chew him out the last time she suspected the truth. She doesn't want a "pillar" between them and was willing to tell him so.

Still, the nuances of their characters and where their friendship even came from are still, by and large, missing. Let's hope Aoyama gains some inspiration from his little dip back into MK!

[candy__chan]

You're quite welcome! *glomps back for good measure*

I understand that...but that movie eight thing still alternates between making me crack up and annoying me. "I love you, Shinichi...lookit the shinies!!" FOCUS, WOMAN!!

[ran_mouri82]

As Ran-chan's no dummy, my Mouri Sense (like Spidey Sense) is telling me she was kinda eager to change the subject. XD *pats Ran-chan*

And sadly, Sonoko's not much better. "Oh, Kid's bad and ditched us! Wait, so he was trying to help us? Ooh, I knew that hunka man wouldn't let us down!" (Alright, I threw in the "hunka man" part, but still!)

[ran_mouri82]

o.o Thank you ever so much!

To be honest, that metaphor of barriers and being touched through them was unintentional. Maybe it's just one of those visceral things that spark in the writer's mind?

Thanks again! That's so sweet of you to say! *blushes*

[twosen]

I love the imagery with the raindrops! And it's a rare glimpse of the Ran beneath the Ran usually shown - doubt flickering at the edges of her seemingly unyielding faith in Shinichi. Makes her seem far more real. =D

[ran_mouri82]

Thanks a lot! It's heartening to read that it made Ran seem real. What I especially tried to create was a scene with Ran not weepy, but pensive. I loved rereading the time Ran came back from making Valentine's chocolate and called her own tears "stupid". It made her seem conflicted rather than blubbering. Points scored by Aoyama! XD

[twosen]

You definitely communicated the "pensive" part - yeah, I don't see her as a weepy sort either. If anything, she's incredibly strong in her faith in Shinichi! A lesser girl friend would have given up on him by now...