Did I say this was going to be four parts? Obviously when you all thought I said four what I actually meant was five. >.>
Title: Sign of the Cross (a.k.a. the Completely Gratuitous Guilty Gear Vampire AU)
Summary: Gears or vampires, it's all just another day's work for the Holy Order. But they never do quite manage to screen some of their more
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Some small things:
a whole nest posting as a theatre company
and throws ever volt of lightning
Looking forward to the rest of this!
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SORRY
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Fixed, thanks for pointing those out. Seems like there's always one or two that slip through the cracks. *cough*
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I wish I had more coherent things to say. But I loved it and am definitely looking forward to the next part. ♥
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Oh, and... was that nest of vamps posing as a theatre troupe a reference to Anne Rice vampires?
Yuh-huh - I was hoping people would spot that. (Is not Sol vs. a large crew of Anne Rice Angstpires a beautiful image? XD) As I mentioned in the first part, this fic contains scattered references to every piece of popular vampire fiction I could think of in a hurry - because just because I'm writing vampire cliche fic does not mean I have any obligation to take it seriously. >D
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celadonite caught the other two I was going to mention, but here's a third:
dazed and bruised by miraculously unbroken.
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>< I remember that error, I could have sworn I fixed it. Ah well, fixed now.
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*embarrassed*
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Ky is perfectly IC, it's so like him to blame himself for being anything less than being 100% perfect. His feelings and emotions are very well portrayed. Likewise, Sol's "actions speak louder than words" attitude is perfectly IC.
The cliffhanger is too cruel to us poor readers! I need to know what happens next! Do we get some description of Sol licking Ky's neck?
All those years of Order training that saw him promoted to captain before his twentieth year
This line made me wonder, is the timeline different than GG's? How old are Ky and Sol in this fic? How long have they known each other?
And while I'm wondering, can vampires in this fic eat other food besides blood? Since in the first chapter Sol mentioned something about eating something before his shift.
Did I say this was going to be four parts? Obviously when you all thought I said four what I actually meant was five. >.>
Five? Why not six or seven? ;P *is shamelessly greedy*
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Ky is perfectly IC, it's so like him to blame himself for being anything less than being 100% perfect. His feelings and emotions are very well portrayed. Likewise, Sol's "actions speak louder than words" attitude is perfectly IC.
I actually rewrote that section a couple of times before I was happy with it, and I still wasn't certain I hadn't overdone it a bit in the end. Glad the work paid off. ^_^
The cliffhanger is too cruel to us poor readers! I need to know what happens next! Do we get some description of Sol licking Ky's neck?
You should've seen what I managed to do with this fic back when I was sending in-progress snippets to my beta-reader. There are so many places this could be cut for a cliffhanger that everyone else missed out on. =P You'll just have to wait and see, won't you?
This line made me wonder, is the timeline different than GG's? How old are Ky and Sol in this fic? How long have they known each other?A bit ( ... )
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Five? Why not six or seven? ;P *is shamelessly greedy*
Alas, I did my best. ;_; Maybe I can push for an epilogue or something <.
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Do push, do push! They say you should pick quality over quantity, but I'm all for quality and quantity ;P Can you tell I'm really fond of Greed in FMA?
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