The Case of the Reluctant Guide Chapter 1 There's Always Something
Summary: Sentinel Sherlock Holmes has been searching for his Guide for 18 years, and now he is going to find him in a situation even he could never even imagined.
Disclaimers: I certainly do not own Sir Arthur Conan Doyle’s amazing creation of Sherlock Holmes and Dr. John Hamish Watson. I also do not own Steven Moffat, Mark Gatiss, and the BBC’s ( Read more... )
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And since you asked for feedback on spelling/grammar/etc....
that his intelligence and control without the need of a Guide was because he was psychopath. Other's speculated
I think this should have 'were' instead of 'was', since the subject consists of 2 things (intelligence and control), and an 'a' before 'psychopath'. Other's shouldn't take an apostrophe, since it's a plural rather than a possessive. Personally, I would put a comma after 'speculated' as well, because of how I'd prefer to set off some of the phrasing, but that may be just me.
older Sentinel and Guides
I suggest making 'Sentinel' plural in this paragraph, to match 'Guides'.
I like the world-building you've put in here regarding protein markers and their use in identifying candidates. It makes sense that there would still be a few outliers like Sherlock who wouldn't be handled neatly even under the improved system. I'll be interested to find out more about John's background in this setting later on.
And young Sentinels and Guides, ( ... )
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undiagnosisable
'undiagnosable' seems to be the word you were going for here.
I like the way you set up the change in the conversation, when Sherlock reacted to the strange scent he detected on Mike. It's a nice touch that Mike realizes what Sherlock's probably reacting to while Sherlock has no clue. :)
That he was a solider
'Soldier' takes the 'd' before the 'i'. It's unfortunate that spell-check often doesn't quite grasp the grammar well enough to catch this one.
who as far as anyone can tell is completely untrained and until three weeks ago inactive
Hmm. I'll be *really* interested to learn later on how *this* came about - John apparently being inactive all that time - while Sherlock was active. Granted, Sherlock's observation earlier was that being triggered by something happening to one's partner involved being in the partner's presence at the time and we have no evidence that that was the case, and circumstantial evidence that it *wasn't* the case...
You were going to introduce my Guide ( ... )
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