fifth

May 08, 2011 12:53

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[Jill is seated with her back to a bush, staring at a few of the robots. She has a notebook open in her lap.]

Constructed Intelligence...except there's no Council for you, is there?

[She sighs, looking down at the paper.]

Tell me if you think this is any good, if you can.

In which Jill reads her own poetry )

jackie bledsoe-follet, reno (final fantasy vii), gabrielle monsigny, *vine, *video, *action, canada, jill half-a-prayer

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restlessdevil May 8 2011, 22:29:31 UTC
Sounds good to me. I'm not exactly well-read when it comes to poetry, though. I think it'd be impossible for me to even write any.

And sometimes we all need to brood. [Smiles]

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freemade_grace May 9 2011, 04:40:30 UTC
[She blinks at the vine, but shrugs it off. Nosy little thing.]

I'm finding that speech making and poetry are more similar than I thought.

Brooding is healthy, but I'm thinking of the type who cries, gets smashed, and then starts reading their work in a loud voice until they get booed down.

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restlessdevil May 9 2011, 13:13:43 UTC
Interesting. [Zenobia thinks. Could she write a speech? She's never really tried.] So, if the poem's to be believed, you're pretty awesome, huh? People call you a legend?

Haha, ah, that sort of brooding. The "no one understands me or how unique I am so keep the ale coming, barkeep" kind.

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freemade_grace May 9 2011, 16:50:58 UTC
When I was alive, yeah. Don't mean to brag, but...I was famous, in good and bad ways. Only for doing what I thought was right, but it was the first thing to come to mind.

"I've graduated with top honours, you'll all weep when I'm better than you all, greater than the sun!" There were so many of them back home.

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thesamename May 9 2011, 01:27:57 UTC
You weren't kidding.

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freemade_grace May 9 2011, 04:42:04 UTC
No. It's harder than I thought, though.

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thesamename May 9 2011, 19:02:28 UTC
[Jackie likes her poem, in a rather detached way. The sentiment annoys her, and writing poetry is silly in her view, but it was Jill's poem and that was obvious enough, and that made it successful in its own way.]

I guess that's why it isn't for everyone.

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freemade_grace May 9 2011, 20:09:04 UTC
Mm. It does give a way to pass the time, though. Since there's not a group of people who want to organize and strike against unfair institutions, and I don't have much expertise outside of that.

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tasercopter May 9 2011, 03:01:27 UTC
All I gotta say is, those robots are lucky they don't understand words. Can you find willing victims next time and not transmit that shit all over?

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freemade_grace May 9 2011, 04:43:56 UTC
[Jill scoffs at the vine. Figures it would transmit when she wanted privacy.]

Could have stopped watching.

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tasercopter May 9 2011, 04:52:19 UTC
It played the whole thing before I could get to the plant or get away from it. So, no. [Reno does look like someone who has only recently woken up.]

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freemade_grace May 9 2011, 05:01:01 UTC
[She just shrugs and goes back to looking at the robots. It's not her place to defend her poetry, really, she has no idea what she's doing. So, if this woman hates it? Can't please everyone.]

I'm sorry, miss.

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welljustwatchme May 9 2011, 04:08:27 UTC
I'd say it's beautiful, but I wouldn't claim to know anything about poetry, not really. It sounds right, though.

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freemade_grace May 9 2011, 04:46:23 UTC
You really think so? Huh...It's just a rough outline, though

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welljustwatchme May 9 2011, 04:56:09 UTC
Don't add any more to it.

Umm, I mean... Not that I can really tell you what to do or anything, but anything more would dilute it, I think. You might lose some of its power. B-but that's just what I think.

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freemade_grace May 9 2011, 05:04:12 UTC
[She's surprised. No one's ever talked like this about her work before, not this type of work.]

Then I won't.

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aureation May 10 2011, 00:11:01 UTC
A bit cliché, but it certainly gets your message across.

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freemade_grace May 10 2011, 01:11:48 UTC
I didn't expect it to be otherwise-pretty much copied the style of things I've heard before.

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aureation May 10 2011, 01:18:54 UTC
I don't know much about writing poetry myself, but I believe most great poets start out from imitating someone, don't they?

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freemade_grace May 10 2011, 02:27:11 UTC
I thought it was more putting down what you thought.

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