Demon Eyes

[qafan]

Ok, this is my next entry for the brigits_flame challenge for week two.

Week 2 Prompt: Demons

Title: Demon Eyes

Author's note: Right, so since the prompts sort of go hand in hand, I decided to explore the world of  "Dark Angels" a bit more. However, this introduces a whole new character: Nathanael. I've had him on my mind for a few days, and only

Comments

[foreverbm]

This is good!

You really got into Nathans feelings despair and loss and I could imagine and feel his pain as I read it.

[qafan]

Thank you! I have had his character in mind for a few days, and haven't been able to completely shape him until I sat down tonight to write. I think I'm pleased with how this turned out. At least, I like how he is shaping up. I definitely plan to develop him more.

Thanks for commenting! And thanks for the encouragement! Much love, my dear. ;)

[foreverbm]

I will watch for your next update on this story :) and look forward to seeing where you take him

[qafan]

hehe yay! I'll definitely be using LJ as a sounding board on it. Did you read the other one as well? Dark Angels? That has the background of not only Nathanael, but his entired family. (I don't name Nathanael in that one - mainly because I've just named him tonight - but he is Gabriel's son)

[drippedonpaper]

I think this does happen a lot, that people can't get rid of their pain so they lash out in desperation. Surrendering to bitterness can cause you to become less human. If you have decided not to risk caring again, who really cares about anything?

Great job getting into the minds of how people become capable of inflicting such pain. You are brave to go there.

You definitely show us there is often more than meets the eye. Most people loved at some point in their lives, if we could only see it.

[qafan]

I'm glad you enjoyed it! I really don't like to simply have a stereotypical "evil" character. I like to incorporate their motivations, what made them who they are. As you said, everyone loved at some point, and no one starts out to be evil. Sometimes it's thrust upon them. I really am excited to delved into this more. All these little snippets will be spread out throughout the story, if in fact it is pursued like I would like.

[aisling87]

This is very fast-paced. I like it :)

[qafan]

Thanks! I love it when it just flows onto the page like this one did. It was great writing it.

[merthin]

I agree with aisling87 above. You pack a lot into several short paragraphs. Sometimes, I see the human race as Nathanael does. Thankfully, I can usually ignore it, most of the time. ;-) This was well worth the read. Good luck.

[qafan]

Thanks! Ironically, when I had finished writing it, I was surprised that I didn't have anymore than I did, because I can usually go for pages writing, and this turned out very short.

[qafan]

Thanks a lot! I hope others agree!