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[pyracies]

First and foremost, tyroantiheroine, this at least two thirds yours. You know where the other third has to fall, luv. ♥

TITLE: Untitled
PAIRING: Jack & Elizabeth
RATING: PG
SUMMARY: Jack imparts wisdom, while getting Elizabeth inebriated. C'mon people, you know how they do.
AN:Trying to get back into the swing of writing after a long fight with writer's block

Comments

[slashfairy]

interesting twists in this.
some typos, some spelling/punctuation things- do you want them here in comments, or in email?

time, gold, power and constructs, gears in a machine she will never see perhaps because i'm studying US foreign policy at the moment this kind of hurt, the way it resonated...

[pyracies]

Haha, I wrote this an hour @ 3am after a night of entirely too much fun. Hence the me-not-noticing-typos thing. I think I have fixed them, though.. all the little things that Firefox's internal spell checker won't find for whatever reason.

& US foreign policy is definitely heavy on my mind, as well. But the point I was also trying to put across was that these things are not only American creation, they've been happening as long as there's been a ruling class. The history of social revolt is the history of the people, I suppose, and I pray that it still exists in moments long after we're gone.

[sharklady35]

A very fine example of philosopher!Jack, making valid points even in the midst of random meanderings.

[pyracies]

He's good for that, innit'e?

[tiamary]

I enjoyed this a lot and look forward to rereading! Jack's difficulty in expressing himself due to being distracted by Elizabeth was sexier than I would have expected...the story slowly seduces.

Are you the same person who wrote "Grog: A Tale of Ribaldry" (and another J/E story) on aff.net? I see some similarities in the use of language.

[pyracies]

Thank you so much! I can't help but have some sexuality come through in my Sparrabeth writing, any accurate portrayal of their dynamic would have to at least suggest their very obvious (canon!) tension.

Alas, no, that wasn't me. But, maybe I should look it up. If you wanna see what is is me (by chance, you know, if you're bored or something ;p), my "vault" is voilesnoires. Thanks again!

[tiamary]

A little warning: when I first read "Grog" (J/E subsection of Pirates of the Caribbean subsection of the movies section of adultfanfiction.net) I thought it was brilliantly written but also thought the writer didn't like Jack and Sparrabeth, because he/she made an effort to portray Jack as a real pirate. A real pirate, mind you: complete with rotting, brown teeth, immorality, filthy body, and (ahem) ill health. However, his/her other story on adultfanfiction.net is very pro-Jack and pro-Sparrabeth so I think the "Grog" thing was a way for him/her to explore, what would Jack have been like if he were a realistic pirate? You might like it.

[pyracies]

Ehhhhh, as to their deplorable hygiene, I'm inclined to agree, but I always get a little annoyed when people equate "real" piracy with morality, or the lack thereof, as they most certainly did not lack it as a generalization. Like any group of people, some them were assholes, some of them were not.....

heh, this is the part where I promise not to rant about them being desperate proletarians who hated on some capitalism and occasionally raided slave ships. ;p

[obfusc8er]

I almost needed a map to follow the dialogue, but that's not a criticism. It's just Jack. *g* In fact, I like the way the the narrative bits reflect Jack's pattern of thought.

Makes sense that he'd consider the rules and time-serving ways of the landbound to be great sins. Rather sad at the end, as Liz realizes she's still trapped by it all.

Very nice. Thanks for the fic.

[pyracies]

Hell, I need a map (or half a bottle) to follow the man, and he lives in my head! XD

Thanks for the feedback, doll, glad you enjoyed it!

[pyracies]

True enough, that was definitely an influence for the thought. I've come to equate the fear of the ticking crocodile with adulthood (the moment of realized mortality being.... you know, the end of childhood), rather than, ah, pirateyness. Though it still fits well, I think.

Thanks!

[tiamary]

See, that's the reason for all of my neuroses. I became aware of that ticking clock at age 6, WAY too young to lose your sense of immortality.

[pyracies]

Heh. Hell, I'm 22, and I just realized I was gonna die, like.... two years ago.

I'm still reeling.