Okay, character introductions here - please suggest any improvements, as I'm not quite happy with this chapter ( Read more... )

I've been working on an original piece of fiction for quite some time, now, but recently started a rewrite, as it was losing direction. I've decided to put up the revised chapters here for some constructive crit, so any plot suggestions are more than welcome! This is still a work in progress, and I have no particular ideas as for when it will be ( Read more... )