Ahahaaha I was so nervous about including her in this, her and amanda both, cuz, welp, who the hell's even heard of them. Diva is such a sweetheart though she is great. And. /o\ so close to crossing my own lines here hahaha yeesh. (There was also a comically terrible mixup early on in the writing process...)
UHM the point is though! I am glad you liked it + know who she is!
duuuude i am so in love with the feel of this, it was really realistic but not nasty gritty realistic, sweet realistic. i love the way you write dialogue. and i liked how you got the contrast between dumb discussions about bread and lines like Ryan is sure, suddenly, that the universe is a very good place and that everything will be alright and made it all fit so well, and aaah the tomato-ing of gottfried was so WEIRD and AWESOME and just perfect.
i liked how you wrote z too, because even as a minor character she had flaws which was skilful and also awesome. and this: “Actually,” Z says. “Actually, it’s William Bruce Rose. Junior.” was great, just great, i don't even know anymore, okay, just take my brain, just take it.
haha, i'm so glad this worked! and the tomato thing was partly ... i think softlyforgotten's fault? i spazzed out, originally they were gonna egg his house but with alex being vegan and all that seemed ILLOGICAL and i stressed out at people WAY TOO LONG until she (or someone?!) was like "what about tomatoes" but gilbert fuckin gottfried, seriously. did YOU know that fucker goes on tour? i had no idea.
and i'm glad z worked in this, i kind of wish i'd given her a little bigger part but i think it's okay the way it is.
so man yes thank you for this comment and for reading and \o/
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UHM the point is though! I am glad you liked it + know who she is!
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i liked how you wrote z too, because even as a minor character she had flaws which was skilful and also awesome. and this: “Actually,” Z says. “Actually, it’s William Bruce Rose. Junior.” was great, just great, i don't even know anymore, okay, just take my brain, just take it.
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and the tomato thing was partly ... i think softlyforgotten's fault? i spazzed out, originally they were gonna egg his house but with alex being vegan and all that seemed ILLOGICAL and i stressed out at people WAY TOO LONG until she (or someone?!) was like "what about tomatoes"
but gilbert fuckin gottfried, seriously. did YOU know that fucker goes on tour? i had no idea.
and i'm glad z worked in this, i kind of wish i'd given her a little bigger part but i think it's okay the way it is.
so man
yes
thank you for this comment and for reading and \o/
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(i was going to tag this with #gottfriedtrivia but then realized it isn't twitter, uh.)
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wow
wow, i really should have done more research, that's like a goldmine right there
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