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0040: The Fallen - Dianna and Christopher Reed

May 14, 2003 21:55

Bonus! A Mary-Sue and a Marty-Stu! Geeze... I say that like it's a good thing.

TITLE: The Fallen
PERPETRATOR: Dena Nehele Black Widow Queen

SUE-O-METER: (how bad is it?)

WRITING:

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y - hogwarts years (non-specific), be - blue eyes, sw-o - sparklypoos, ph - muggleborn, jr - politician, rating - awful, b - speshul eyes, sw-o - bitchiwitch, be - green eyes, ar - melt the heart, rom - none, pc - gary stu, ntt - dark/emo/punkish titles, ntn - plant name - non flower, bh - blond/blonde hair, bh - black hair, related to voldemort, b - canon character lookalike, jr - guardian (protector of some kind), af - glamour, b - gem like eyes

Comments 16

donna_c_punk May 14 2003, 21:28:13 UTC

I only have one thing to say:

What the fuck is this about exactly?

ariastar May 14 2003, 21:36:12 UTC

... Not only did that make absolutely no sense whatsoever, but managed to make it really, really melodramatic. Not to mention that Snape's character was totally raped.

And Dianna was born with tattoos? I thought those were called "birthmarks", actually, and that they usually didn't get sore in accordance with danger. Also ...
“You have three?” Albus questioned, “So you draw most of your power through the Moon. The Sun, and Stars only add to that power. That was the reason Joanne warned me about you becoming overly sensitive during times of danger, or when the Moon is full. I thought she had meant you were part Werewolf at first, but I understand now.”
How, pray tell, can someone be part werewolf? Aaagh. Horrid Sue. Horrid Stu. Horrid story.

dawndragon May 14 2003, 21:38:11 UTC

The notes section alone makes this story worth 5 exclamation marks!

anonymous May 15 2003, 04:18:16 UTC

You forgot to mention the uber spushul tatoos! Now Dianna will cry and Chris will kill you. Tsk, tsk.

- Blue Shade

panderia May 15 2003, 08:32:55 UTC

“Dianna, my love, you know I would never hurt you or them, please don’t cry.”

um...that's her adopted brother and they grew up together and he calls her "my love". Can anyone say incest? lol

The fireplace roared with a brightly burning fire.

When did Snape's office ever have a "brightly burning fire"? Everytime it's mentioned in the book, is is not described as cold, or is it just me?

theonewhospeaks May 21 2003, 18:12:32 UTC

I think the LJ ate my last attempt to post this, so my apologies in advance if it shows up twice.

The only time I remember for sure that there was a fire in that fireplace is in CoS when Minerva lit one in it so HP and RW could eat those sandwiches there.

I think there was a fire there too when Severus called to Remus through it in PoA-but I'm not sure.