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5109: Owls, NEWTs and Famous Potters - Eloise Murphy Jones

Jan 04, 2022 01:09

First 2100 entries properly titled.
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Title: Owls, NEWTs and Famous Potters

Perpetrator: EloiseMurphyJones

Sue-O-Meter: Toxic

Cover/Banner Art: The writer's avatar is a drawing of a wolf.

Summary: “Eloise Murphy-Jones had always thought of herself as a bit of a wallflower, but as she enters her Seventh and final year at Hogwarts, things start to change. ( Read more... )

pw - woobie/cry for me, rating - toxic, pc - self insert (sue is me), ar - friend to all, pc - b swanitis, pf - new/next generation, p - sue what plot? swp, pt - orphan, pc - relationship sue, ap - academic pursuit, b - speshul hair

Comments 2

anonymous January 11 2022, 14:10:16 UTC

That is a LOT of girls. As someone who often struggles to write all four Marauders in the same scene with equal attention, juggling...*counts* eight just in Eloise's house sounds like a tall order. Is there a reason the writer needs so many? The writer did, at least, do a decent job at establishing a personality for the girls, but that's so much exposition and description in one paragraph that my eyes glaze over before they finish ( ... )

pottersues January 12 2022, 06:13:57 UTC

I'd actually not taken the time to count. Even so, I should have remembered the Mary Sue pileup tag.