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4181: Can't Stop Thinking About You ~ Keira Mcain

Feb 02, 2018 23:22

Title: Can't Stop Thinking About You
Perpetrator: Amy100
Sue-O-Meter: Awful
Cover/Banner Art: None
Summary: “Sirius Black is handsome, popular and intimidating. Keira Mcain is quiet and beautiful, but tries to stay away from Sirius, although her attempts don't usually work . As the year draws on, and they get closer and closer, will Keira resist ( Read more... )

rating - awful, b - waist length hair or longer, bh - brown hair, pc - relationship sue, be - green eyes, jr - tramp, pf - marauder addition (fifth marauder)

Comments 6

anonymous February 3 2018, 14:32:09 UTC

I thought the weird formatting was from an error you made while posting the sample. Then I read the fanfic and realized you didn't make an error.

Where does the idea of manwhore!Sirius come from? Was it the pinup posters of muggle girls he had in his bedroom in )OotP? That's actually not unusual for a teen boy who's into girls to do. It says nothing about how he would interact with real girls.

pottersues February 4 2018, 03:30:50 UTC

I believe that personification of him existed before OotP, but the posters fed the frenzy for said characterization as quite a few interpreted the posters this way. The problem is, how many girls also have pinup posters of guys, but don't get treated the same way simply because the guys - unlike the girls, aren't posing in bathing suits?

Just read further anonymous February 3 2018, 14:46:35 UTC

It seems that the weird formatting stems from the author using her phone to type this and post it. That's a sign that she should not use the phone to post this, yet she clearly uses the app in the Chapter 1, Chapter 3 and maybe Chapter 4, but it's too hard to tell. For some odd reason she didn't use the app in Chapter 2, yet did so in the next chapter even though she knew it would fuck with her fanfic.

yemi_hikari February 5 2018, 07:58:09 UTC

Do you really like a character if you portray them in a negative manner which isn't canon? I get playboy!Sirius is popular, and it can work, but most of the time it's poorly written and used as way to make the Sue become the girl who cured the guy of their playboy antics, which is never good, nor really believable.

anonymous February 13 2018, 07:32:59 UTC

Reminds me of Alice Quinn from the TV adaptation of The Magicians. Starts off as the stereotypical quiet, nerdy girl and somehow quickly becomes... well, not quite a whore, but vulgar vocal and fetish-y.

darth_gojira June 5 2018, 00:23:04 UTC

What's worse than a story about a slutty forced interest for Sirius? One with bizarre formatting even by Pit standards.