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0037: Vengeance on her Mind - Icy Williams

May 11, 2003 20:34

An evil-sue

TITLE: Vengeance on her Mind
PERPETRATOR: S.E.A

SUE-O-METER: (how bad is it?)

WRITING:

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y - hogwarts years (non-specific), be - blue eyes, pc - villian sue, ar - friend to all, rating - bad, rom - draco malfoy, bp - dark mark, ph - durmstrang, sw-o - bitchiwitch, bh - red hair, nts - elemental name, ntt - dark/emo/punkish titles, sw-o - tootsitramp, rom - oc, bp - death eater mark, je - student (transfer), p - sue what plot? swp, ship - draco/oc, pt - orphan, pt - death of parent(s)

Comments 7

theeternalmind May 11 2003, 19:45:06 UTC

Am I the only one who thought of Robin Williams only with deadpan humor when she read the name Icy Williams?

neev May 11 2003, 19:57:41 UTC

Good grief... That's just...scary, really. Icy Williams? What the HELL? Ooooh, it hurts....

Although I have to admit, the writing style is not *too* bad. The bit with all the rumors about...Icy...was actually rather amusing. Of course, the next paragraph starts to focus on her and the story instantly goes down hill, but...

neev February 9 2012, 06:17:13 UTC

I know, I liked that, too. In fact, as annoying as I managed to find that fic in so little reading time, I really, really liked that part.
"Hannah! Enough!"

armanininja May 11 2003, 21:39:19 UTC

She wasn’t strange because of her looks-- quite the contrary, many of the boys thought she was attractive--

Ouch.

I agree with the above said: The writing style isn't that bad....But, argh. Icy?

dontgiveahoot May 12 2003, 02:47:43 UTC

Yet another example of a reasonably good author brought down by the desire to Mary-Sue. As has been noted, the gossip surrounding... the Williams girl... was reasonably on the mark, because in canon a lot of the students are notorious gossips. (Although it would make more sense to say that it was MISTER Weasley's love child - Mrs Weasley wouldn't exactly be able o hide a pregnancy from Arthur and her kids, and then foist the kid off onto the father, now would she?) But eugh. That name? Just - no.

Jen / Quoth the Raven

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clannoire May 16 2003, 05:04:53 UTC

Sorry, dear. She was a very obvious Mary-Sue ...

They had never known Hogwarts to accept exchange students, and she looked much too young to be the new Defense Against the Dark Arts Teacher. Was there a special reason for her being there? Why would Dumbledore allow her to come? Automatically rumors started spreading: Maybe she’s a genius and is teaching Defense Against the Dark Arts! (No! We’ve already established that’s not the case!) She’s Mrs. Weasley’s lovechild! I mean, look at the color of that hair! (My mum didn’t have an affair you idiot!) She’s an escaped criminal in disguise as a student! (Now really Hannah!) I bet you she’s the heir to a fortune! (I know! Did you see those robes she had on?) Her family is a gang of travelling bank robbers! (Hannah! Enough!)

I just loff this paragraph, now that's something creative! Nice way to introduce a character.

But ... ICY WILLIAMS?! Most blatant Mary-Sue ever?