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[stupidgenes]

Player name: ten.
Characters played: Asch the Bloody :: Tales of the Abyss :: stupidgenes
Personal concrit link: Here. Screened, anon ON, IP OFF.
Anonymous allowed/encouraged? Y/N: Y.
Other comments? Please be straightforward and honest with me. I love feedback and am interested in improving. The only thing I would have difficulty changing is promptness in tagging since my schedule tends to be extremely erratic.

[blastiafreak]

We've only had a couple threads together, but they've already been a ton of fun. He has a great amount of attitude when something warrants it and enough calmness when he's not around people being pains. I can't wait to see where else you take him!

[stupidgenes]

Thank you! I hope I'll be able to do more with him in the future. xD

[umathematic]

Ahhhh, Asch. So glad to have one in Poly again, and from what I caught of his tags, your voice seems sharp and fabulous. ♥

Admittedly, I haven't threaded with him yet, so it may be a matter of limited perspective--but from what I've caught of his posts, he seems more of a brat than typical? His second post is the readiest example I can think of: where he made a very particular point not of baking a better cake than Rita, but of competing with her over it. It's an immature side of him that I mostly remember coming out with Luke canonically! So I was wondering if something happened in his earlier post to bring out his temper like that.

But yes, Asch was one of my favorites in Abyss, so I hope to see him around more! *____*

[stupidgenes]

Thanks for the feedback!

re: Competing with Rita, I think it was her pride in her own cake post that spurred Asch's competitive spirit, but I can see where it's an exaggerated bratty flare-up. While it's easy to troll him, he probably shouldn't be so ready to troll right back, I guess. So I'll try working on tempering him a little more in regards to reaction when people push his buttons. I'm not sure how much or little insight this will provide, but I have a timeline of all his interactions here that may be a summarized point of reference for critique. Thanks again, and I hope I'll be able to get him out there a little more. xD

[servidude]

So far I've been delighted by everything Asch does, whether I'm threading with him or stalking his threads with others. I do love his temper and his awkward social fail, and putting aside how interesting I find his relationship with Guy, I think watching Asch with Luke is my favorite thing.

Because Asch is trying, and Luke is trying, and they're both sort of meeting in the middle, but it's clear that any wrong move and then things will explode stupidly again. Asch is awkward and abrupt and bad at expressing himself, and you portray that really well.