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polgarawolf

Star Wars work in progress You Became to Me

Apr 14, 2007 02:30

Seventy-seventh part of a WIP
Title: You Became to Me (as suggested by avari_maethor)
*Pairing: Mainly Anakin/Obi-Wan with some mention of Padmé
Rating: Uhm, probably a borderline PG-13/R-ish, maybe (?)
Disclaimer: I do not own the lovely boys from Star Wars, more's the pity! What I do have is an extremely contrary muse that refuses to shut up and leave me ( Read more... )

i have a bad feeling about this . . ., . . . dying a little bit each day . . ., "a certain point of view?!", . . . let go . . ., . . . surrender . . ., fear is the path to the dark side., . . . delusions of grandeur . . ., let go of everything you fear to lose, do or do not. there is no try., . . . not this crude matter., try not. do or do not. there is no try., you can't stop the change., never tell me the odds!, . . . i love you . . . i know., we are encouraged to love, . . . you want this . . . don't you?, never underestimate the force!, be mindful of your thoughts . . ., . . . luminous beings are we . . ., trust me!, always two there are . . ., i must not fear. fear is the mind-killer, kenobi & skywalker - anakin & obi-wan, . . . your thoughts betray you, . . . i sense something . . ., . . . good job., don't be afraid., help me . . . you're my only hope, that's impossible even with a computer

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mickeylover303 April 22 2007, 05:11:05 UTC

So long, oh sith lords, so wonderfully long. I am in love with this. I have to go back read your previous chapters.

I'm so sorry that you're sick. I do hope you feel better, soon, because I cannot honestly wish any form of illness upon anyone.

polgarawolf April 22 2007, 05:54:44 UTC

*Grins crookedly* Glad somebody else likes long. I know I ramble a bit, but I like long plotty things, even when the plot bits (politics, bleah!) drive me nuts. And that reminds me, I should crosspost with links to all the chapters again soon . . .

I feel better this evening, though! Actually checking my email and everything! I'm hoping that means tomorrow I'll actually be coherent enough to write some more.

mickeylover303 April 22 2007, 13:22:36 UTC

Okay, I'm back eight hours later. Yes, I was so enthralled that I read it straight. That's why I love long stories. I read pretty fast. And I enjoy your run-on sentences (why do they have such a negative connotation?). There's a reason why Dickens is one of my favourite authors.

I'm not going to belittle you with useless prattle, but this was such an amazing journey, thus far. It was so interesting to see writing develop as I progressed through this wonderful novel. Such an entrancing thing to see.

I am simply awed by the length of this fic. I honestly hope to write as much as you, one day.

But back to the story. There's so much I could say, but I would need to write a dissertation or something...which is pretty much out of the question.

And I am awfully glad you are feeling better, because I cannot even stand my sinuses, much less the flu.

polgarawolf April 23 2007, 02:00:37 UTC

*Is absolutely thrilled to know you read it straight through and wasn't bothered by the writing style!* Thank you so much! You have no idea how entirely happy this makes me! I write like this because I think like this and I tend to speak like this, too (when I get on a roll), and I honestly think that more people tend to think and process what's going on around them in extremely long, complex, enjambed sentences and thought fragments than they realize. This style just seems realer to me, more valid for trying to get underneath the skin of the characters. I have readers who ask me to trim down paragraph and sentence lengths, and I usually feel at a loss because I don't know how to do it without foxing the balance of my characters' thought processes or messing up the presentation of certain situations as the events are unfolding. I realize that the words and sentences can pile up and seem overwhelming, a little, but life's a little overwhelming as it's happening to us, too, isn't it? *Laughs a little breathlessly and spins in chair, ( ... )