Star Wars work in progress You Became to Me

[polgarawolf]

Thirty-second part of a work in progress
Title: You Became to Me (as suggested by avari_maethor)
*Pairing: Mainly Anakin/Obi-Wan with some mention of Padmé
Rating: Fairly PG-13ish now, but inevitably at least an R (?)
Disclaimer: I do not own the lovely boys from Star Wars, more's the pity! What I do have is an extremely contrary muse that refuses to shut up

Comments

[avari_maethor]

I love it. It's awesome. Truly makes my night.

[polgarawolf]

I really am glad you like it. Bail's giving me headaches. I keep getting fragments of things he's going to say/do out of order with the rest of what's going on. But I have to get 'em down, or I risk losing them. Infuriating man! *Sighs and rolls eyes* I suppose Anakin will deserve it, for being such a pest as a Padawan, losing his lightsaber all the time and endlessly trying to get himself shot while trying to keep Obi-Wan in one piece and all that . . .

[avari_maethor]

Lol! Sooo aside from Bail giving you trouble is there any news on when you will be updating?

[polgarawolf]

Five scenes in various stages of completion, none in order enough to be post-able any time soon, since they'll probably end up being in chapters thirty-three through thirty-five, from what I've gotten down in my notes. Writing's been a challenge, time-wise, since the week before Thanksgiving. Week after, it was my grandpa's 81st birthday. Now, it's all Christmas stuff that's eating up the time. Been scribbling notes on scrap paper endlessly but have been typing as the scenes come (regardless of their order), which means the notes really haven't gotten fleshed out into actual typed material yet. Wednesday I have all to myself and I will be devoting to typing from my notes. Should get this chapter done and the next at least half done. Thursday's a baking day, which means the material I get typed on Wednesday should get put up by Friday if they don't get put up Wednesday evening.

[polgarawolf]

Uhm . . . Okay, let me just say that this story is not at all close to done yet. It's a WIP (work in progress) and this is just what I have of it so far that's coherent enough to post. I'm currently in the process of hammering out enough more plot in this little AU 'verse of mine for at least half a dozen more parts and at least one follow-up (possibly two or more, depending on how much I can keep things going) that will probably be just as long as this story

[polgarawolf]

They aren't the same as they were before because these bodies literealy are not the bodies that they had before they became one with the Force. And they've literally carried away something of the Force's Light with them, within them, something that other beings tend to react to as though to the dazzle of light off of water or a crystal prism. It's a very mesmeric quality, and most beings are wired to associate light and items (be they other people or just things) of fascination and magnetism with great beauty, so it's perceived as increased beauty. That's what the Light translates into for most beings, and it's going to be problematic because weaker willed beings (who're more susceptible to the Jedi mind trick thing) will want to lose themselves in that Light. So . . . yeah. It's not something that they asked for (though it is technically something that they invited through their actions, in so utterly and now repeatedly submitting themselves to the Force that they've held nothing back and allowed all of that power to pretty much do

[arkan2]

Sorry, this took me longer than I expected. I'll probably have to come back tomorrow to analyze the scene more thoroughly, but here's my initial impressions:

Your description of the Force and Jordan's description of the One Power are very similar, which could be coincidental or due to you or Jordan or Lucas or all three borrowing from each other or some outside source. (Not plagiarism, just borrowing.)

Your description of the Dark Side (particularly your frequent description of it as a "taint") also calls to mind Jordan's description of the Dark One's taint. Again, this could be coincidental or harmless borrowing.

Additionally, your description of the danger posed by the taint of the Dark Side resemble Jordan's descriptions of the Male Half of the One Power as a fight for survival (as opposed to the Female Half, which requires surrender).

Now, none of this particularly puts me in mind of Winter's Heart, the similarities I hear are general Jordanesque. Some of them may evoke particular passages, but not from Winter's Heart, I think

[polgarawolf]

*My mind is currently out boggling at the notion of being able to copy something that it's never read. Please leave a message at the sound of the tone*Okay, so, Jordanesque over-the-top, let's-see-how-many-words-we-can-cram-into-one-sentence writing style and descriptive imagery aside, I'm probably safe from a real charge of plaigerism (which is good to know, even though I've never read the book and am quite selfishly seriously considering not ever reading it, if only because of the massive headaches the very existence of it have helped to cause me). However, you think that Lucas and Jordan and I probably have similar enough ideas on certain things (the Force, the One Source, my version of the Force - which is a pure energy field that binds all things together, as Lucas said, but which I've said can be warped by the actions/intent of others but cannot itself be morally evil or good because it is a natural phenomenon like, say, the existence of a sun or star and therefore can only have any kind of moral judgment applied to it from