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Everyone but sowell ignore this post. This is feedback for your new fic. For some reason your lj doesn't like me tonight and wouldn't let me post so here's what I typed on the second go:
( I'll try and move this over again later.... )
( I'll try and move this over again later.... )
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I think you did wonderfully with Josef's voice and I didn't find him like Logan at all.
Good, that's such a relief. Every time I wrote a line of dialogue I had to stop and second-guess whether I was thinking of JD as Josef or JD of Logan.
I always got the impression that he'd seen too much to pussyfoot around and that hesitation could be more lethal to one's own wellbeing than launching an assault. But on top of that he has morals as long as you don't cros shim.
Yeah, Josef is hedonistic, but I also think everthing he's seen has made him sort of relentlessly pragmatic, in contrast to Mick's more romantic take on life.
I feel like Coraline could get a little darker with Josef than Mick and I loved that side of her.Of all the unrealized potential in this show, I think I'm most frustrated by the writers not delving deeper into Coraline and Josef's long history. I want to know when they met, what their relationship was like, what they experienced. It's ( ... )
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