I laughed a lot. I just imagine Yonghwa being in his usual Seohyun-induced state of mind, which is all flowery and spiked with "You can't touch her" signs - and suddenly she comes up with "Should we have more skinship?" and his imagination runs wild! Afterall, there are hormones and all that stuff.
Personally, I like it very much, and Yonghwa is VERY controlled in your story, after Seohyun quips the skinship part. :) Love it.
"seohyun-induced state of mind" HAHA. I love that phrase! :D It totally reminds me of the time when hyun accidedtally called him and he overheard her conversation with a friend and he had this drunk, crooked smile on his face :) Thank you for your comment!
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anonymous
September 16 2010, 14:58:14 UTC
i agree with this POV... this is not a race afterall. moreso, if they do things unnaturally, they will come across as so trying-hard. . . write more pls.
i can completely imagine yong hwa like this!!!! its so sweet of him to encourage seo hyun to just be herself on the show and not pretend at all.....tht shows how much he cares abt her... once again, great job!!! write more soon please!!!
You nailed it!
anonymous
September 17 2010, 06:15:48 UTC
Hi I happened to come across your fanfic and I all I can say is it's pretty sweet.
It seems like you stay true to their original characters. I can really picture them doing this in real life.
The only minor thing is that it's unlikely that seohyun would hug yong in front of her manager.
But of course given that this is a fanfic, please by all means don't limit yourself to 'staying true to their characters'. They may become the source of inspiration, but you're always the author.
Re: You nailed it!pokeadot_xxSeptember 17 2010, 07:30:39 UTC
Thank you! I'm glad you think it seems like their original charaters. And I just realised that you're right about the manager thing. I never thought about it until now.. haha :D
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Personally, I like it very much, and Yonghwa is VERY controlled in your story, after Seohyun quips the skinship part. :) Love it.
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HAHA. I love that phrase! :D It totally reminds me of the time when hyun accidedtally called him and he overheard her conversation with a friend and he had this drunk, crooked smile on his face :)
Thank you for your comment!
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if they do things unnaturally, they will come across as so
trying-hard. . . write more pls.
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its so sweet of him to encourage seo hyun to just be herself on the show and not pretend at all.....tht shows how much he cares abt her...
once again, great job!!! write more soon please!!!
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Than you! I will :)
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It seems like you stay true to their original characters. I can really picture them doing this in real life.
The only minor thing is that it's unlikely that seohyun would hug yong in front of her manager.
But of course given that this is a fanfic, please by all means don't limit yourself to 'staying true to their characters'. They may become the source of inspiration, but you're always the author.
I hope you'll write more!
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And I just realised that you're right about the manager thing. I never thought about it until now.. haha :D
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