Comperio (Supernatural, gen)

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Title: Comperio
Author: zeplum
Fandom: Supernatural
Rating: 12+
Notes: Thanks to zarahemla and resmin for their beta duties including my crazy tense shifting and fascination with the choppy. Title, according to the online Latin-English translator, means to learn; to lay open. [ETA: As subsequently educated by sathinks it's actually I LEARN in the first person. Which still

Comments

[xoverau]

Awww! I like the way you explored the dynamics between the brothers and their father, it has the same tight internal consistency that the show does. And Dean's POV is so big-brotherly.

[plumtastic]

Woot! I always hope that I've got the big brother vibe going, but am never quite sure. Possibly due to being the little sister issues or what, I don't know. *g*

same tight internal consistency

Yaye! That's one thing I was really kinda trying for here. Thank you so much for your comments!

[dotfic]

Really good exploration of Dean's POV. You've said so many things that make sense here, about the learning and about Dad trying to let Sam have a life, and how Sam "gets a little too inside his own head."

[plumtastic]

Right now there can be *so* many intpretations of that back story - this is just the one that made sense to me. But I started twigging on how John must've had to learn this trade before passing it on to Sam and Dean. Just that as an idea is something I really quite like.

[alethialia]

This was great!

He would've been grateful for the choice.

Gah, I could hear this. Excellent perpective on Dean here. You've captured the essence of that ache in such few words, but you did it well.

along the way he even finds a favorite bar with good bear and spectacular pizza.

Heh. I think you meant beer in there, but heh. So Dean.

it's actually because Sam's constructing a fabulously good sex fantasy in his head. Knowing that, Dean would worry less.

::laughs:: And again, it sounds just like Dean. You've got him down expertly.

And I love the ending. This is a fabulous little look inside Dean's head. Very nice.

[plumtastic]

Heh. I think you meant beer in there, but heh. So Dean.

What? Dean's not a grizzly mountain man that enjoys a good slab of bear when he comes home at night? News to me! *g*

Man, I always make the most interesting flubs while editing. Hee.

[julissak01]

For the sake of saying something different, I think you really made it come through just how inadvertently selfish Sam's decision to leave was. And, to add to that, this was a great Dean POV piece, as has been already said. I mean, ouch, man. *pets him*

[plumtastic]

I think there's a lot of selfishness from all of them. Really, Dad raises kids while hunting ghoulies? Possibly not providing the basis for a stable adolesence.

There's a lot of underlying tension that's poking out episode by episode. It's great to watch and great material to play with later. :)

[whipper]

Why hadn't he been granted the same chance as Sam?

He couldn't even say for sure that he would have taken it, but still --

He would've been grateful for the choice.

Just perfect.

[plumtastic]

Thank you. :)