Chapter Fourteen

Jan 26, 2008 17:40


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Hey Mom. Tried to call you but you didn't pick up.

Just wanted to let you know I got back home okay. Love you.

Jet watched Zuko walk away. )

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pinumbra January 27 2008, 20:55:39 UTC
Oh how I missed these chapters ;A;

but anyway, back to the chapter.
This chapter was particularly beautiful to me, because it conveyed Jet's confusion so well, I can't really place my finger on it, but it just made sense. How he struggles to keep the love for Long, how he hurts because of the break up, and his feelings for Zuko. Loving somebody you feel like you are betraying because you still have strong feelings for somebody else you cannot trust because of past hurt. Oh this is so delicously complicated and heartbreaking.

As an afterthought, I thought it was HILARIOUS how you included ROn-JIan and Chan. Now all that's missing is some Sozin references.

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kick_back_80s January 28 2008, 15:48:55 UTC
*grumbles something about she could have missed the update*

aaaaw! poor long!

and jet :(

and lol@that phone conversation about earplugs

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kick_back_80s January 28 2008, 15:49:50 UTC
*about how she
^was totally too lazy to delete and repost XP

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catiechu January 30 2008, 11:10:54 UTC
OH MAN SEXY NAPS AWESOME ALI AND I WERE JUST DISCUSSING THEM

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T.T valerian_rina February 5 2008, 21:46:39 UTC
This is my first comment here. I read all 14 chapters nearly in one turn. The sleepless night was worth it, I can tell you. But instead of babbling about me I will tell you how much I love this story. This is why I created this account after all...

This chapter was so sad, I felt like crying since the beginning... Oh, see what you've done, you broke my heart. It's almost scary how you captured Jet's feelings. I loved the telephone calls so much. How Zuko always sounded surprised, like he just hoped Jet would call but didn't really think he would deserve it... The earplugs! XD Seeing Jet and Zhao chat was pretty funny and the "Should I be worried?" was just priceless.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter. <33
*sniff* Where is my ice-cream?

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moulinmeerkat February 6 2008, 02:40:29 UTC
Oh. My. Gods. T__________________________T
You guys make me want to throw furniture. Amazing. I agree with everyone when they say it's sad. Probably one of the most heartbreaking chapters written so far. I love you guys! ;_;
And hahaha noisy Hahn and Zhao...and silly Chan and Ruon-Jian. >D
That is day-making material right there...

And have you guys been doing the Avatar Kink Challenge? I have done one Jet/Zuko and am posting another one tonight. And I've already been told that I should post the first one on jetheartszuko...sooo anyone want to review it for me and tell me what's horribly wrong? ^_^

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ali_wildgoose February 6 2008, 04:09:17 UTC
Hey! <3

Haha, yeeaaaaaaaah we both had fun with that kink meme -- I wrote a deeply misguided Zhao/Zuko fic and Foxy wrote some super-sexy Chan/Ruon-Jian!

I'd be happy to give you notes on your fic if you need a hand, though be warned that I take my beta-duties seriously and might suggest a lot of changes. You can send me an email at ali _ wildgoose at yahoo dot com

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moulinmeerkat February 6 2008, 20:46:43 UTC
No no no being critical is good thing. I am constantly striving to be a better writer. This being the reason I don't write much and put it out there for people to read, is because I know it isn't great a lot of times, and I don't edit my own writing very well.
Except an e-mail from me soon! Thanks Ali!
AHAHAHAHA I thought I recognized Foxy's writing style on the Chan/Roun-Jian. >D

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