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Picking Flowers

Apr 18, 2009 21:52

Title: Picking Flowers
Fandom: Original
Rating: PG
Warnings: none
Summary: We don’t choose our destinies. But what if we could?
Notes: Written for the April week 3 challenge at brigits_flame, theme “flourish”. That sound you hear is me fervently praying that the week 4 theme isn’t “garden”, because if it is, I’m screwed. :P

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( The garden seems to stretch out forever in all directions, flowers and trees of all shapes, sizes, colors, scents, spanning out all around her. )

original fiction, brigits_flame

Comments 25

So sweet!! <3 esteebee April 19 2009, 17:50:18 UTC

This is such a warm hopeful story, not quite like your usual angst haha
I really love it though :)

I enjoyed how you wrote the beginning, and the fairy was very cool! (It reminds me a little of the web-comic Misfile) The flowers were an awesome way to look into the future, and I loved the paradox of how if you choose a future the flower has to die; all the other possibilities of your life have to die for the one future as well.

I'm leaving to go back to school in a few mins, so I will see you soon!!! <3

Re: So sweet!! <3 kuhori_rei April 22 2009, 00:04:25 UTC

Hey, I can write things other than angst! I just choose not to! :P

The beginning was a lot more visual than the way I usually write, but I wanted to just kind of throw you guys into the setting. As for the fairy--she actually started out being kind of spazzy and Doctor Who-esque and then toned herself down. :P

Thanks lovely!

kuroilotus April 19 2009, 18:57:54 UTC

Beautiful.

kuhori_rei April 22 2009, 00:04:36 UTC

Thank you!

sue_bridehead April 19 2009, 21:07:54 UTC

Very sweet indeed. What a beautiful little story! :)

kuhori_rei April 22 2009, 00:04:45 UTC

:) Thanks!

tierfal April 19 2009, 23:26:07 UTC

I really love the style here -- it meshes perfectly with the content, soft and sweet and fragrant, in a literary sort of way.

(I should really stop pretending I make sense. XD)

The idea is fantastic, and you executed it beautifully. :D

Ha, I wrote a piece to "garden" for something else earlier this week -- here's hoping that's not the prompt we get! XD

kuhori_rei April 22 2009, 00:05:06 UTC

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. :)

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kuhori_rei April 22 2009, 00:06:24 UTC

Thanks so much! My writing tends to be kind of dark and quirky, so I'm always kind of surprised when one piece actually appeals to a lot of people. :P Can't piss everyone off all the time, I guess. But I'm glad you liked it!

(Also, I love your username. That's adorable.)