[2PM | 026.] on a jet-plane
on a jet-plane
nichkhun/wooyoung
pg-13
3,455 words
for: belinder from help_japan auctions.
[in sum]: Nichkhun meets Wooyoung on an airplane. They quickly become entwined in each others' lives. But does their relationship progress too quickly?
note(s): Lame summary, I know. :| Bel, I hope you enjoy reading this. ♥ I tried for something different. Usually it's " ( Read more... )
nichkhun/wooyoung
pg-13
3,455 words
for: belinder from help_japan auctions.
[in sum]: Nichkhun meets Wooyoung on an airplane. They quickly become entwined in each others' lives. But does their relationship progress too quickly?
note(s): Lame summary, I know. :| Bel, I hope you enjoy reading this. ♥ I tried for something different. Usually it's " ( Read more... )
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...there's so much...oral imagery in this. I'm not sure if I was looking out for it because of your username or not, but while reading, I noticed that you would focus on things that other writers I've read don't. I like it, it's different. I think that this is where I first noticed it:
And before either of them can say or do anything, Wooyoung has walked right into Nichkhun and is mouthing silent words into Nichkhun's own lips. Perhaps it was because I noticed 'mouthing'...I tend to always pick up on when titles (in this case, author) are dropped into a story...at any rate, it's interesting that once I read that, there was so much other oral imagery that I saw.
The boy's pupils shake frantically as he tells Nichkhun his name.
This is such an interesting way to word this...the point would normally be made that one's voice shakes, but I like that you went with something else.
But then again Nichkhun's always liked ( ... )
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about the "pupil shaking"... lol. i guess it's my asian-ness creeping out. in korean, there's a phrase that translates roughly into "pupils shaking" when there's an emotionally loaded moment, so that is why i used that phrase. :)
i agree it was ooc with the real khun and woo :| which is the part i had trouble with. but when i thought of this plot, i immediately thought of nichkhun and wooyoung ♥ perhaps it's the fan in me. haha.
you have no idea how relieved i am that you enjoyed it or were able to read it over once lol. like i mentioned, if you have any other requests (i.e. pairing/plot/etc) feel free drop by ;)
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oh? cool, I didn't know that.
Haha, I don't mind, it was a really nice read.
Okay~
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i don't think i deserve it but thank you :)
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i feel the shift in your writing style lol, the way everything is so much faster and less described, and somehow it makes everything seems in a rush, but i actually like it, cos it feels like khun is in this confusion between loving wooyoung and avoiding him because his brain said so, and because he was scared of whats to come.
i like that the accident that changes how he feels wasn't wooyoung getting into a near-death experience. it's so widely used and im so glad you didnt venture into that side :)
and i also like the realism of this, and how your characters have their own insecurities and deep thoughts, and they seem to sway quite a bit here and there, and it makes it seems so real.
it was beautiful, what can i say more? :)
(gasp does this mean you're hiatusing after this?? :(((((( )
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yeah, i tried something new. a whole bunch of narration and then...that moment. lol. i think i need to work on that though.
and omg, the accident. haha. i was trying to jolt nichkhun out of his insecurities by making him think, "what if wooyoung dies?" poor junho :(
if i had had more time, i would have drawn this out more and it would have been this multi-part fic. but i'm kind of glad it was shorter. :P
thank you for reading and leaving such a wonderful comment ♥ you are too kind to me.
(and yes, i need some break time from writing...though since it's a habit it might slip out. but i'll still be around lj :D )
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