[2PM | 026.] on a jet-plane
on a jet-plane
nichkhun/wooyoung
pg-13
3,455 words
for: belinder from help_japan auctions.
[in sum]: Nichkhun meets Wooyoung on an airplane. They quickly become entwined in each others' lives. But does their relationship progress too quickly?
note(s): Lame summary, I know. :| Bel, I hope you enjoy reading this. ♥ I tried for something different. Usually it's " ( Read more... )
nichkhun/wooyoung
pg-13
3,455 words
for: belinder from help_japan auctions.
[in sum]: Nichkhun meets Wooyoung on an airplane. They quickly become entwined in each others' lives. But does their relationship progress too quickly?
note(s): Lame summary, I know. :| Bel, I hope you enjoy reading this. ♥ I tried for something different. Usually it's " ( Read more... )
...there's so much...oral imagery in this. I'm not sure if I was looking out for it because of your username or not, but while reading, I noticed that you would focus on things that other writers I've read don't. I like it, it's different. I think that this is where I first noticed it:
And before either of them can say or do anything, Wooyoung has walked right into Nichkhun and is mouthing silent words into Nichkhun's own lips. Perhaps it was because I noticed 'mouthing'...I tend to always pick up on when titles (in this case, author) are dropped into a story...at any rate, it's interesting that once I read that, there was so much other oral imagery that I saw.
The boy's pupils shake frantically as he tells Nichkhun his name.
This is such an interesting way to word this...the point would normally be made that one's voice shakes, but I like that you went with something else.
But then again Nichkhun's always liked things spicy: food, gossip, and now...perhaps a certain someone's spicy fingers.
This made me chuckle a bit, hehe.
But at the end of the day, Nichkhun's tongue betrays him by murmuring only one word in his sleep.
"Wooyoung."
So simple, but yet it evoked a powerful effect on me.
I really enjoy that this piece has a certain realism to it. Perhaps not in the way that the real Nichkhun and Wooyoung would behave, but rather in the sense that people do feign interest in things in order to be around someone they like for longer periods of time. I also liked the inner turmoil that Nichkhun goes through, as well as all of the things that are left unsaid.
Ahh. :D
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about the "pupil shaking"... lol. i guess it's my asian-ness creeping out. in korean, there's a phrase that translates roughly into "pupils shaking" when there's an emotionally loaded moment, so that is why i used that phrase. :)
i agree it was ooc with the real khun and woo :| which is the part i had trouble with. but when i thought of this plot, i immediately thought of nichkhun and wooyoung ♥ perhaps it's the fan in me. haha.
you have no idea how relieved i am that you enjoyed it or were able to read it over once lol. like i mentioned, if you have any other requests (i.e. pairing/plot/etc) feel free drop by ;)
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oh? cool, I didn't know that.
Haha, I don't mind, it was a really nice read.
Okay~
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