collide (you and i)

[onthose_strings]

title collide (you and i)
summary ROAD TRIP FIC. set somewhere in the future.
rating pg, as always
word count 2,932
pairing fernando torres/sergio ramos
disclaimer i lie
notes THIS IS A BIRTHDAY PRESENT FOR adorerdollylux. i hope you like it, lovely! and by way of actual notes: i have never been to spain, so sorry if the progression of places doesn't make

Comments

[being_georgia]

Loved it so much! The rhythm and tempo of it. The same question repeating 'What are you going to do?' as if this journey is to help find the answer. And finally the answer at the end of the story :)
You also kept them in character perfectly.
Well done! And thank you.

[heyaeroplane]

thank you so much! you always leave the most lovely comments.

i was so scared to post this because of a) the characterization and b) the pacing, so i'm really really glad it worked :]

[tanique33]

What a GREAT 2 line ending. I seriously loved serg's question and the answer was the PERFECT place to end it.

As a person who LOVES a roadtrip, and as a person who is spending some time in Spain, currently, this was truly up my alley. Really great descriptions. I felt like I was in the back seat. I really enjoyed this : )

[heyaeroplane]

aw, thank you so much! i'm glad you liked it!

where in spain are you/will you be? ( i'm super jealous! i might be going to Burgos this summer though :] )

[tanique33]

I'm in Barcelona. Thankfully took the reigns, so they got to see it. lol I'm living in Barcelona, we'll see where else I'll visit. Andalucia is high on my list.

I really do look forward to reading this again.

[heyaeroplane]

oh, nice! i hope you get to Andalucia!

[atenism]

my goodness it's amazingly indeed. i love it so, so much coz it's so warm and sweet. Sernando has a such perfect trip in Spain and pretty good re-starting for Nando, or just for both them. it makes me a day! i know it's for adorerdollylux's birthday and i prefer her birthday is every day, then you could post such beautiful fic. every day. :) thank you so much!

[heyaeroplane]

thank you so much, dear.

[titania_torres]

I love it!
Its got such a wonderful pace to it and everything just fits so perfectly. The line about colliding has got to be one of my favourites it is beautiful.
=D

[heyaeroplane]

eeee thank you so much <3

[inge_24]

this is so lovely. liked it very, very much.
a little bit sad (the divorce and the retirement), but the last sentence gives hope that everyting will be ok.

[heyaeroplane]

thank you so much :]