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alicachen July 29 2010, 00:53:32 UTC
Sooo, this is yunho... Poor jaejoongie. He's in love with a cry baby =_=
This yunho is a cry baby and only playing around with jae's feeling.
Glad to know that jae willing to leave him.
Agree with yoochun, the way jae tells the story is funny. Like having a chat with a girl, am I right? LOL
If soulmate is in this progres, yunjae should've been cleared sOonest...
So, meenah... I like this chapter..Update soon please?
Thanks for the hard work!

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only4dbsk July 29 2010, 03:37:15 UTC
you're good at picking out characterisitics!! :D he is so a cry baby!

YEA! well..we cant blame jae..he's always been talking to his sisters so HAHA..he kinda talks like that too :D i'd love to have conversations with jaejae

♥ thanks darling. im so glad you like it!!

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keiyashi July 29 2010, 02:11:15 UTC
Poor Yoochun ): Jae, look in front of you to see what you really need~ not a dick like Yunho's... only Chunfsce T^T

♥♥

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only4dbsk July 29 2010, 03:34:46 UTC
XD LOL! Jae needs to see the lightt~~
i think if they just talked about it!! but its easier said than done huh..it's hard to acctually DO IT DX

u knows i loves you ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥ :D

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keiyashi July 29 2010, 05:53:36 UTC
XDD
this is like a real relationship :/

I DO KNOWS EET. ♥

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yceam July 29 2010, 02:29:45 UTC
SPOT! <3

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yceam July 29 2010, 02:38:14 UTC
that was pretty good for a spill...
and it was casual and a bit comfortable but-

they're heavy in the heart!

soulmates have to learn how to really talk to each other...

P.S. i'm at school using the wifi supposedly for studying BUT what can i do, this is your update i should not miss!

<3

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only4dbsk July 29 2010, 03:30:24 UTC
yea..thats the mood i was trying to create XD
its funny cuz in real life..they totally do ^^

:LFDA:L! *glomps* I FEEL SO SPECIAL :D dude the schools wifi is MADE for reading fics ;DD

*tackles your badass min icon*

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be_ddelusionall July 29 2010, 04:10:53 UTC
Okay darling, you ready for this?
There are three instances where you should have periods instead of commas, BUT, I'm pretty sure it's something we didn't talk about before. So ... happy hunting. Let me know if you need a hint. *giggles*

But really, so so so so much better. YAYAY

and dude, Yunho ... *SMACKS HIM REALLY REALLY HARD* ... WTF, yo???

I like this talk; it really brought the JaeChun closer and closer and anything that does that is my new favorite thing.

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only4dbsk July 29 2010, 04:31:12 UTC
OMG I THINK I KNOW! ok..so after the dialogue tag, there needs to be a period right? like

"Blah Blah," he said. "Blah blah blah."

i fixed what i could find!!!

i like your comments...they look so well punctuated, of course, I've only just started to notice :)

i like this talk too...but i still feel their distance and it kills me that i don't know if i can fix it PROPERLY!!

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be_ddelusionall July 29 2010, 04:40:34 UTC
YES YES YES YES YES!!!!

BUT

you have to be careful.

For example, from you're story:
“Jae, if you turned homo for that Ho, he must be something great.”

If you did it this way:
"Jae," Yoochun said, "if you turned homo for that Ho, he must be something great."

That dialogue tag interupts a complete sentence, so you do need a comma after said. In the parts of your story, a new sentence started after the dialogue tag, so a period is needed.

*SMACKS YUNHO AGAIN JUST BECAUSE I CAN*

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be_ddelusionall July 29 2010, 04:44:04 UTC
*your

... from your story:

I fail.


... )

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zoeybunnygals July 29 2010, 06:10:49 UTC
poor yoochunnie......he felt as if he were alone in the world

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only4dbsk July 29 2010, 20:26:46 UTC
he's still got changmin but still not undivided :(

♥ :)

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