Sooo, this is yunho... Poor jaejoongie. He's in love with a cry baby =_= This yunho is a cry baby and only playing around with jae's feeling. Glad to know that jae willing to leave him. Agree with yoochun, the way jae tells the story is funny. Like having a chat with a girl, am I right? LOL If soulmate is in this progres, yunjae should've been cleared sOonest... So, meenah... I like this chapter..Update soon please? Thanks for the hard work!
you're good at picking out characterisitics!! :D he is so a cry baby!
YEA! well..we cant blame jae..he's always been talking to his sisters so HAHA..he kinda talks like that too :D i'd love to have conversations with jaejae
Okay darling, you ready for this? There are three instances where you should have periods instead of commas, BUT, I'm pretty sure it's something we didn't talk about before. So ... happy hunting. Let me know if you need a hint. *giggles*
But really, so so so so much better. YAYAY
and dude, Yunho ... *SMACKS HIM REALLY REALLY HARD* ... WTF, yo???
I like this talk; it really brought the JaeChun closer and closer and anything that does that is my new favorite thing.
For example, from you're story: “Jae, if you turned homo for that Ho, he must be something great.”
If you did it this way: "Jae," Yoochun said, "if you turned homo for that Ho, he must be something great."
That dialogue tag interupts a complete sentence, so you do need a comma after said. In the parts of your story, a new sentence started after the dialogue tag, so a period is needed.
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This yunho is a cry baby and only playing around with jae's feeling.
Glad to know that jae willing to leave him.
Agree with yoochun, the way jae tells the story is funny. Like having a chat with a girl, am I right? LOL
If soulmate is in this progres, yunjae should've been cleared sOonest...
So, meenah... I like this chapter..Update soon please?
Thanks for the hard work!
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YEA! well..we cant blame jae..he's always been talking to his sisters so HAHA..he kinda talks like that too :D i'd love to have conversations with jaejae
♥ thanks darling. im so glad you like it!!
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i think if they just talked about it!! but its easier said than done huh..it's hard to acctually DO IT DX
u knows i loves you ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥ :D
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this is like a real relationship :/
I DO KNOWS EET. ♥
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and it was casual and a bit comfortable but-
they're heavy in the heart!
soulmates have to learn how to really talk to each other...
P.S. i'm at school using the wifi supposedly for studying BUT what can i do, this is your update i should not miss!
<3
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its funny cuz in real life..they totally do ^^
:LFDA:L! *glomps* I FEEL SO SPECIAL :D dude the schools wifi is MADE for reading fics ;DD
*tackles your badass min icon*
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There are three instances where you should have periods instead of commas, BUT, I'm pretty sure it's something we didn't talk about before. So ... happy hunting. Let me know if you need a hint. *giggles*
But really, so so so so much better. YAYAY
and dude, Yunho ... *SMACKS HIM REALLY REALLY HARD* ... WTF, yo???
I like this talk; it really brought the JaeChun closer and closer and anything that does that is my new favorite thing.
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"Blah Blah," he said. "Blah blah blah."
i fixed what i could find!!!
i like your comments...they look so well punctuated, of course, I've only just started to notice :)
i like this talk too...but i still feel their distance and it kills me that i don't know if i can fix it PROPERLY!!
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BUT
you have to be careful.
For example, from you're story:
“Jae, if you turned homo for that Ho, he must be something great.”
If you did it this way:
"Jae," Yoochun said, "if you turned homo for that Ho, he must be something great."
That dialogue tag interupts a complete sentence, so you do need a comma after said. In the parts of your story, a new sentence started after the dialogue tag, so a period is needed.
*SMACKS YUNHO AGAIN JUST BECAUSE I CAN*
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... from your story:
I fail.
( ... )
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♥ :)
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