Okay darling, you ready for this? There are three instances where you should have periods instead of commas, BUT, I'm pretty sure it's something we didn't talk about before. So ... happy hunting. Let me know if you need a hint. *giggles*
But really, so so so so much better. YAYAY
and dude, Yunho ... *SMACKS HIM REALLY REALLY HARD* ... WTF, yo???
I like this talk; it really brought the JaeChun closer and closer and anything that does that is my new favorite thing.
For example, from you're story: “Jae, if you turned homo for that Ho, he must be something great.”
If you did it this way: "Jae," Yoochun said, "if you turned homo for that Ho, he must be something great."
That dialogue tag interupts a complete sentence, so you do need a comma after said. In the parts of your story, a new sentence started after the dialogue tag, so a period is needed.
There are three instances where you should have periods instead of commas, BUT, I'm pretty sure it's something we didn't talk about before. So ... happy hunting. Let me know if you need a hint. *giggles*
But really, so so so so much better. YAYAY
and dude, Yunho ... *SMACKS HIM REALLY REALLY HARD* ... WTF, yo???
I like this talk; it really brought the JaeChun closer and closer and anything that does that is my new favorite thing.
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"Blah Blah," he said. "Blah blah blah."
i fixed what i could find!!!
i like your comments...they look so well punctuated, of course, I've only just started to notice :)
i like this talk too...but i still feel their distance and it kills me that i don't know if i can fix it PROPERLY!!
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BUT
you have to be careful.
For example, from you're story:
“Jae, if you turned homo for that Ho, he must be something great.”
If you did it this way:
"Jae," Yoochun said, "if you turned homo for that Ho, he must be something great."
That dialogue tag interupts a complete sentence, so you do need a comma after said. In the parts of your story, a new sentence started after the dialogue tag, so a period is needed.
*SMACKS YUNHO AGAIN JUST BECAUSE I CAN*
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... from your story:
I fail.
( ... )
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OMG *dances* i get it :D check check and check, comma nazi!
*glomps you for making me feel smart* ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥ love you babe!
*pulls yunho by the collar and drags into bedroom* i think he should be distracted for a while and leave chunjae alone :)
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well, if you're pulling him into the bedroom ... *gets whip ready* ... smacking just isn't going to cut it. :)
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you have whips HANDY! o.O interesting :D
the Ho doesn't get abused enough XD
(i keep feeling the need to edit my comments too but then i'm like WTF? LOL!)
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