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oceansex

[fic post] Counting

Sep 01, 2009 14:44

Title: Counting
Rating: NC-17
Genre: Romance/Humor
Pairings or Characters: Naruto/Sasuke, Sakura, minor Iruka/Anko
Warnings: boysexing, and Naruto cries, if that bothers some people
Word Count: 4533
Summary: Naruto, being slightly dense, jumps to conclusions.
Author Notes: Fic originally posted here, but now that reveals are up, figured it'd be ( Read more... )

rating -- [nc-17], !fic, gift, pairing -- naruto/sasuke, naruto

Comments 14

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oceansex September 2 2009, 16:39:24 UTC

thank you! 8D

aibari September 1 2009, 22:34:24 UTC

So I was like, OH HEY HERE'S A NARUTO FIC WHERE I KNOW WHO EVERYONE IS, and then I read on and realised that, no, no I didn't. (GODDAM IT ( ... )

oceansex September 2 2009, 16:43:22 UTC

Naruto is the idiot, Sasuke has Issues and Sakura's the one with the hair. Oh, and Rock Lee is Neville Longbottom with bigger eyebrows.

that's basically it, right there. XD

Sakura was my second favorite part of this fic, right behind Naruto's stupidness lol.

WHERE SHOULD THE COMMA GO? LET ME AMEND THIS IMMEDIATELY. ;_; and the counting part at the end was just to tie in with the counting bit at the beginning. I really didn't care for it myself. and I guess "LOTS AND LOTS OF HAWT MAKE UP SEX ALL OVER THE APARTMENT WAS HAD" would've been a perfectly apt way of ending it, lol.

thank you for reading bb <3

aibari September 2 2009, 18:01:09 UTC

I love it when the ladies kick arse. :D

"I'm sorry, Sakura-chan, but I really need to talk to you!" Because if you don't put the comma there, "I'm sorry" becomes a part of the next bit - so if the next bit can stand alone as a sentence, it works - "I'm sorry I couldn't make it" - but, to quote Wikipedia, "Commas are placed before, after, or around a noun or pronoun used independently in speaking to some person, place, or thing".

The same thing goes here:
"Thanks, Iruka-sensei!"

here:
"NO, Anko! T-That's not it,"

and here:
Do you, Iruka-sensei ( ... )

nakedhearts September 1 2009, 22:48:39 UTC

That was some hot shit, chick! Love it! ♥

oceansex September 2 2009, 16:43:47 UTC

why thank you! x3

nuvolaluz September 1 2009, 23:33:26 UTC

Naruto and Sasuke accusing each other of infidelity is love and funny. Also, the whole I'm not refusing to sleep with you... you were the one who refused the new bed thing? Makes Sasuke such a whiny bitch.

I wish I had a fluffy SasuNaru icon for this comment.

oceansex September 2 2009, 16:45:10 UTC

Sasuke is a whiny bitch, no ifs, ands or buts about it. XD

selvatori September 2 2009, 03:30:45 UTC

Ohoho~ Sweet Lord! that was some hawt make-up sex >:D But rly; with all that smex, they look like some newlyweds on their honeymoon. Aww~ I wanna see them in Hawaii~ (typical =P)

oceansex September 2 2009, 16:49:42 UTC

I wonder what the Narutoverse equivalent of Hawaii would be? BECAUSE I WOULD LOVE TO WRITE THEIR VACATION THERE. XD

Naruto: STOP FLIRTING WITH THE HOT BARTENDER /ANGER
Sasuke: I'm not flirting with him, you're the one running around half naked and hitting on every guy or girl ogling your delicious, bronze muscles.
Naruto: NO I'M NOT. I'M JUST GOING SWIMMING!
Sasuke: Liar, you don't love me. /tantrums and destroys half the resort
Naruto: OF COURSE I DO. /SEXES

.... except, it'd be, uh, a little less dumb. maybe >__>

selvatori September 3 2009, 04:20:26 UTC

Lol!

hitting on every guy or girl ogling your delicious, bronze muscles.

Yup, I'm pretty sure he'll be mad after such a declaration =P (stupid Uchiha pride!) But it's worth it nonetheless~ *smirk*