Comments | oceansex: [fic post] Just Another Slip of the Tongue

oceansex

[fic post] Just Another Slip of the Tongue

Feb 02, 2009 10:38

I'm at work, and I'm writing porn. I'm not sure if I should hope this becomes a regular thing or not.

Title: Just Another Slip of the Tongue
Rating: NC-17
Genre: Romance/Humor
Pairings or Characters: Kiba/Hinata
Warnings: Sexing with two teenagers. If you're offended by premarital sex, or ninja sex, or sex in general, steer clear.
Word Count: 524
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rating -- [nc-17], pairing -- kiba/hinata, !fic, contest entry, naruto

Comments 25

sakuraberries February 2 2009, 23:08:22 UTC

LOL, that was awesome! Loved it. ^^

oceansex February 2 2009, 23:26:12 UTC

yay! thank you! I'm glad you liked it! C:

teh_amazing_one February 2 2009, 23:19:00 UTC

Very awesome!

Last line is the clincher.

oceansex February 2 2009, 23:28:22 UTC

thank you! I had fun with that line, as simple as it is, lol

also, yay for kakashi!porn icons! :D

deadlydiva February 4 2009, 02:31:03 UTC

The last line made the fic... Akamaru... lol

oceansex February 4 2009, 03:27:00 UTC

haha, glad you liked it. x3

shattered_jouka February 8 2009, 04:46:11 UTC

holy crap! ROFL!! priceless, just f*cking awesome! that made me laugh so hard i almost fell outta my damn chair! good job, seriously.

oceansex February 8 2009, 05:25:34 UTC

I'm flattered! I hope you didn't hurt yourself almost falling out of your seat, though! x3

shattered_jouka February 8 2009, 07:07:14 UTC

nah, i caught myself in time -winks- n-n

tokogawa7 February 15 2009, 05:07:59 UTC

I think I'll give you something of a deep review, despite my want to do what everyone else is, I'll stand out. First of all, the point of view was not at all outrageous, This was a good portrayal of passionate love making...that wish to proceed just a little further but with care, especially if you know you're dealing with someone you love. You can't go that mile because you want to make it last and fucking doesn't do much in terms of soft savoring. Kiba wanted to do things in a way that would keep her with him for so long until he thought she'd break back, back to her Naruto ( ... )

oceansex February 16 2009, 03:23:01 UTC

thank you for your comment! you seemed to get pretty much everything I was trying to convey, so that makes me happy.

I think kiba calling for akamaru was just an unfortunate result of him not believing hinata's really there, incredible nervousness, and bad timing. he probably heard akamaru barking in the background or something, too, lol. ah, poor kiba. XD