Slipping Into Darkness... Ch. 1

[o2binla]

Title:  Slipping Into Darkness...
Description:  Canon AU.  My first attempt at a multi-part story!  Er, writing stuff besides smex is challenging, I've found.  Please bear with me. 
Warnings:  Oh yeah!  Angst, depression, and MO!Jack.  I've decided he deserves another kind of story, or at any rate, this plot bunny got stuck in my head.  Not sure

Comments

[sweetje]

Well, you've successfully depressed me with your first chapter. ; )

I'm really not a M/OJack story reader, but I thought I would check this one out. It's kind of interesting to see what Jack is going through after his last meeting with Ennis. And since this is canon, I know that we won't be seeing Ennis again unless in flashbacks. That would be nice.

I am looking forward to your next chapter. You have gotten my interest. : )
Debra

[o2binla]

Hi Debra,
MO stuff has deeply bothered me too! That said, J&E's last scene together has left me thinking that Jack really went back to TX to die, b/c what else could he do? But what if he didn't, and what if he somehow persevered... Also, he's been with Ennis for far too long for them to just disappear from each other's lives. Thanks for reading!

[torry28]

I like the start of this, your writing has a nice flow to it. I could easily see what Jack went through after continuously being turned down by Ennis and finally decided to give Ennis up for Ennis' sake.But my heart already aches for both of them.I don't suppose there is any hope of an ever after for Jack and Ennis in the end?
Thank you and I like to read more please.
Torry

[o2binla]

There's more hope if they're both alive, even if they're not together, than if Jack is dead! Neither J nor E dies here, though I want Jack to try something different rather than just continuing on with Ennis, b/c that's killing him. Thanks for giving this a chance.

[frijo]

Interesting premise and I like your writing. But I have to admit, I still have some hope that in the end E&J will find their way together again... Nah, don't listen to me, listen to your plot bunny ;) Thanks for writing! Frida

[o2binla]

Hi Frida, I too would like to see Jack and up with Ennis, though I think they need some time apart... that four years really improved Ennis' ability to express himself, as you may recall! ;-) But Jack needs to do something different because the thing with Ennis is literally killing him. Thank you for reading and commenting.

[uli1]

"Well, you've successfully depressed me with your first chapter. ; )" LOL at sweetje's comment...

You got me hooked!

"'cause a you Jack, I'm like this"

That is exactly the moment in the movie that kills me.

And the following quote of your story is why! It just breaks my heart...

"Then came the brutal realization that Ennis hadn't moved any closer to him at all, sudden and crushing like getting stomped in the ring. Accelerated drinking and other men provided what comfort there was to be had, but never what he really wanted.

Jack knew Ennis wanted him; his passionate neediness whenever they got together again left no doubt. But it had never before occurred to Jack that Ennis didn't want to want him, that he still believed what they felt for and did with each other was shameful -- not because of other people, but because Ennis himself found it shameful. He wanted Jack against his will. This thing between them was hateful to him, and it was Jack's doing. There'd be no getting it right with Ennis after all."I hope we won't

[o2binla]

Hi Uli,
I'll do my best to update soon as this story is sure on my mind, though it's harder to write than smex! (Maybe I should just cut directly to that... oh no, I was going to challenge myself more :-) Thank you for reading!

[gnashsang]

please wait till at least chapter six for the smex. ;) what you have going here is just as satisfying, i think!!! there needs to be a buildup before they explode. maybe smex with ennis again, that would be sweet, to challenge jack's thinking.

omg. three tumbleweeds. why do i think what happens with the stranger can work to bring jack back to ennis again?

[o2binla]

You see right through me gnash!! Though I'm thinking Jack needs a little time off from Ennis, because he's being such a complete bummer. Not sure I can go 6 chapters w/out smex, but I certainly appreciate your words of encouragement! ;-) L.

[acht_acht]

Oh, that´s terrible - I´m all opposed to MO!Jack, but I really like this. I just never want Ennis to end up all alone and sad. But this Jack seems to be at the end of his rope. Let´s see what will ensue. Clara

[o2binla]

Hi Clara, Yes, Jack is truly at the end of his rope, and I wanted to give him a chance to do something other than die/get killed, although I think the life he's been leading has to end. Thank you for reading!