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nomdeplume13

The finale of Nightmare

Oct 26, 2008 00:50

Two Years Later

Roy adjusted his glasses as he walked through the halls of Central Headquarters. He passed by various lieutenants, majors, sergeants and other military personnel. All looked at him with some mix of fear and respect, but none really looked at him as a human being. It was a persona he really worked to engender while in the office. It ( Read more... )

fma, roy/ed, nightmare

Comments 14

bloody_winged October 26 2008, 05:34:10 UTC

^___^ Aww... *wide grin* You know, that end was just perfect for the story :D I was a bit shocked that you actually let *two* years pass, but well... I think maybe this really was a good idea, seeing that everything had gone kinda slow in this story, and something rushed just... wouldn't have fit ^_ ( ... )

nomdeplume13 October 26 2008, 05:42:08 UTC

Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I knew you'd smack me if there wasn't at least some mention of what happened with Wrath.

I just couldn't leave it with anything less innocent than how it ended, but I'm glad you thought it felt realistic.

bloody_winged October 26 2008, 05:46:18 UTC

Haha, you know me too well XD""" But he deserves to be happy! XD""" (and no, I probably wouldn't have forgiven you if he had died or something similar in this story as well XD""" But I'm sure you're well aware of that XD""")

Like I already said, it wouldn't have fit. I mean, if they had had sex right after Roy retold Ed being raped... I don't know, that just would have been very very unrealistic. The only way *that* would have worked if you had done another time-jump. But for this ff is just fits better this way^^

vexed_wench October 26 2008, 05:59:43 UTC

I am glad everyone got their happy ending . It was nice that you left Ed have some time to find himself.

To me it seems more believable , not like some weird survivors guilt or falling for your therapist .

Al and Riza are just so right as a couple.

Like I said earlier I hate to see it end but I love the way you ended it.

nomdeplume13 October 26 2008, 16:00:41 UTC

Thanks. Glad you liked it. I was hoping that two years without much contact didn't get my lynched by all of you.

I'm just happy that the ending worked for you.

From Mouse1010 anonymous October 26 2008, 06:02:11 UTC

First! Very nice. I love your small monologues from Ed, but you know that.

Good way to work it all out. Warm and fuzzy.

The sharing of the scotch made me think of trying to pop an absurdly difficult wine bottle cork.

Re: From Mouse1010 nomdeplume13 October 26 2008, 16:08:03 UTC

Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

And yeah... heh. Did you ever get that cork out? Or take the corkscrew out of it?

tenshishanai October 26 2008, 07:57:12 UTC

So good... I'm happy for them.. and I'm sad that this beautiful story is over... *sigh* Thanks for writing and sharing this ^^ Loved it =)

nomdeplume13 October 26 2008, 16:08:33 UTC

Thanks. I'm glad you did.

hikaru_9 October 26 2008, 08:08:13 UTC

I find it kinda sad that Roy is no longer able to really share his own abuse experiences with Ed and have him understand.

The way you 'retold the story' worked very well for this too. It wasn't boring, but it still informative and gave the readers something to follow during a very important conversation between Roy and Ed.

A good happy ending. Though i fear this marks the end of FMA writings from you. T_T

nomdeplume13 October 26 2008, 16:27:28 UTC

It is, in a way, but there is always some sacrifice with FMa.

I kept you in mind when I was going through the retelling. I know you hate it when writers reiterate everything that's already been said.

And no, this isn't the end. I am going to pick Cost of a Secret back up and get more into it, because this monster wouldn't let me really do that. And I'm working on a joint story that is FMA based, so, no, not the last from me. :)

hikaru_9 October 27 2008, 00:47:24 UTC

\o/!