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narugami

Part 2

Mar 01, 2006 16:37

Completed part 2. Again, watch out for end-of-game spoilers! No dandruff jokes this time, but I did manage to work in a few snarky comments about beans. 'Emoretta' as a translation for 'Nekaretta' is purely raikochan's invention... I hope you don't mind that I borrowed it. -_- This one's also rather grimmer than the previous one, but the concluding part wil ( Read more... )

stories, tales of the abyss

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ranchelle March 3 2006, 04:16:50 UTC

Part 2! Oh boy! I haven't even commented on part 1 yet XD

occasionally alarmed at his rapid progress. She was sure she herself had never been that shameless.
Love this part - there's this feeling that Florian is going to pwn Anise someday without her knowing it XD

I like your portrayal of Anise - it's very human, and the way she interacts with Florian is so very cute, just like two children, the way they should've been without all the tragedies happening to them.

I'm just thinking if Florian became the next Doushi one fine day, Anise will just go 'what, when? When did this happen??' XD

Argh, when I have time and not procrastinating studying as I am now, I'll comment on Part 1! It's like fone particles. Truly fascinating to study indeed.

narugami March 3 2006, 18:54:05 UTC

there's this feeling that Florian is going to pwn Anise someday without her knowing it XD

...NO COMMENT.

I'm afraid I don't write Anise as being evil enough *sweatdrops* If you think I'm doing a good job, though, I'm glad.

maiki March 3 2006, 05:46:43 UTC

Florian practiced his blinding smile on the cooks, and Pamela and Oliver noticed that the food tasted better, but did not connect the two.

Ahahahahah XDD

Anyway, the bit with Anise's, uh, almost-explosion was nicely done. I got quite emotional there, too but I'm always like that. By the way, do you think Anise will be taller than Florian by now? Or still shorter?

Oh yeah, to reply to your other comment in here: Actually, I would like to see you make a KH2 fic after you play it and (if you) gain interest in my favourite characters, too, which is why I mentioned commission because I would feel bad to request you to do something you might not be interested in for free. *_*;

narugami March 3 2006, 18:51:29 UTC

I wrote those lines (where Anise gets angry) in a seething fury. It was kind of scary actually. ^^; I don't know, I just remembered being younger and being miserable at school, and powerless to change anything because I was technically a kid. Also a lot of this is coming from being smarter than all my classmates and wondering if they were really that airheaded or just pretending to be. Oh dear ( ... )

maiki March 5 2006, 02:45:05 UTC

Heh, personally I'm hoping Florian is still taller. :D

I can't tell you yet. :3 I know you won't write slash, anyway, so don't worry about it. XD Sure, I can freely make an artwork for you anytime!

laurie_jo July 15 2007, 04:54:46 UTC

Eeeeh...I don't know why, but I always thought Anise would group up to be rather small. She's so cute, so 158 cm. would really fit her. It's a huge shame she didn't look older at the final scene of ToA, I was really looking forward to her development. XP

I love this fanfic so much. :D I have all these wonderful words in my mind, but elocuence fails me.
This chapter was lovely, and can I say just how cute your portrayal of Florian is? For being Ion's replica, he's so different from him in certain aspects; and you depicted them beautifully.
Florian and Ion are both so innocent, but they took that quality in another direction.