TW Fic: The Charm's Wound Up

[nancybrown]

Title: The Charm's Wound Up
Author: nancybrownCharacters: Jack, Ianto, Gwen, Martha, Lisa, Tarot Girl, Lois, Johnson, OCs

Comments

[eldarwannabe]

Oh, the wild frontiers of America Texas!

No, seriously, this is beautiful. The opening confused me for a bit, but the ending was perfect, and on re-read it all tied together wonderfully. I love how you subtly tied in details from the Whoniverse that made them each a bit more meaningful.

[nancybrown]

I may have to write a story where this team comes to the States, and they're all, "WTF?"

Thanks for letting me know about the beginning. I wasn't sure how much to tip at the start, but I'm glad it holds together by the end. :D

[eldarwannabe]

Wriiiiiite it!

The word "Peninsula" in the opening was definitely enough for some idea of when it was happening, but I wasn't totally sure until the last part. I really do think it holds together well. :)

[nancybrown]

I'll put in on the list. :)

[temporal_witch]

How wonderful! And how very true - Happy endings are a matter of stopping the story in the right place.

Thank you for this. You do the women of the TW 'verse a great service in the way you write them. I loved every moment of the reading. ♥

[nancybrown]

*glee* I was hoping you'd see this one! :D So very glad you liked it. ♥

[amilyn]

EVERYTHING about this is beautiful. I love your stories with witches and magic and the way it weaves its way through the world. I LOVE the bit with Jack's mother and the torrent of a river that is the lifeline. I have such adoration of every bit of this I can't even say.

Also...Jack and the description of Ianto...and, as so many have said, the most lovely and true line of the piece, "Happy endings are a matter of stopping the story in the right place."

[nancybrown]

Hee! *grin* This? Is why I started laughing when you said you were teaching Act 1.

[missthingsplace]

That was a little odd and a lot wonderful :)

[nancybrown]

Thank you. :) I was aiming for both so yay for hitting that mark.

[immora]

Woooo, I'm reading this months later as I catch up on reading your S3, and I just had to comment on two particular things to be a bit different from the previous comments!

1) I love how the Tarot girl just speaks Jack's words right back to him and that's all that needs to be said. Perfect!

2) Cara and Bernice, eh? Just a coincidence that you chose those names, or is that a little Sword of Truth reference?

Oh okay, one more thing but of the constructive sort, 3) I wasn't sure until the line that has us all going "ooooh!" that Lisa was our Lisa, since you could've been doing a good ol' Whoniverse-style name reusing thing. This may also be because I didn't get until the last section that we were seeing Jack's mother; I'd assumed a peninsula in Wales (if that exists!) and that we were seeing glimpses of strangers rather than familiar faces. So, some additional identifying details probably would've clued me in, but then they might not have been necessary since non-me people got it :D

[nancybrown]

Hooray for catching up! :D

1. I *loved* writing that scene. There's just nothing he can say about her that she can't reflect back.

2. Coincidence, sorry.

3. I write about Lisa a lot, so she's kinda a fixture in my stories. Good to know she needs a little more introduction for a wider audience. :)

As for Jack's mum, it's okay. You weren't supposed to know it was her until the last section and then you were supposed to go back to the first section with an "Ah ha!" of triumph or similar. ;)