[Wild Roses] Second Chances

[named_by_rhyme]

Title: a disorienting morning
'Verse/characters: Wild Roses; Phoebe and the Second Ian
Prompt: 00D "gone"
Word Count: 598
Notes: darthneko requested Phoebe, back in March. As always, I am rusty after a break, so this reads stiffer than it might.

Comments

[klgaffney]

reads fine to me.
the image of the twitch and then "oops! moths!" was really bright. =)
i like the comfortable-yet-new-and-strangeness and yet...a certain dream-like quality to it all? maybe they don't entirely trust/believe in the here-and-now after so long? or i could be just projecting. >_>;

[taennyn]

He's hard to write in an immediate sense, which probably contributes to the slightly offkilter/dream-like. Practice, I suppose, and maybe making it deliberate (until startled out of the dreamish logic by something) might improve't.

[billradish]

I agree with all of this. And I think that most of the writer-seen stiffness might be part of the dream-like quality. Which I personally like.

[taennyn]

woot? I mostly just noted because it's a pretty common effect--the first piece I do after a break comes across more like this than any of the other stuff I do. So. >.>

[taennyn]

I like it too, but feel like I didn't describe it as well as it sits in my head. Grah.

Thank you. :)

[taennyn]

Symposiums/conferences re: worldwalking tricks or methods of stemming the flow of Big Predators From Elsewhere, hosted in the Keep-City, before Ian came up with the Trick. Most of the mage population that wasn't actively protecting the farming populations at the time were trying to come up with Solutions.

Ian was already one of the [court mages], Phoebe was from someplace else and quickly gained a reputation for really, really good troubleshooting of others' work as well as a reasonable amount of personal creativity.

They . . um. Hit it off. A touch. But he was already married (two adult kids when they met, later four MORE kids, including Aifiric), so nothing came of the attraction at the time.

[taennyn]

Unfortunately, I got nothin'--not even her name. She and her brother do sound interesting, though.

[taennyn]

"What was silent in the father speaks in the son, and often I found in the son the unveiled secret of the father." -- Friedrich Nietzsche

Implication is that Phoebe's oldest son was a great example of his father's magical ability, manifested much more strongly than the father's was.

[darthneko]

eeee! ♥ ^___^ I like this side of her.

And the invisible chair was quite striking. Also "The fingers of their spells brushed briefly" makes me go sparkle heart-ish for the images.

[taennyn]

Thank you. :)

Invisible chairs are pretty common with her--she likes to just sit in the air, instead of reeling in a chair.

:) I liked it as a brushing-in-passing gesture, but he was standing in the kitchen and she was seated at the near-kitchen table, so it wouldn't be physical. It's really interesting to write two active mages together--as they both definitely are. Will be interesting to see what kind of dynamic it develops, given more space to do so.