Comments | my_young_friend: What Happens In The Van, Really Won't Stay There, PG-13

my_young_friend

What Happens In The Van, Really Won't Stay There, PG-13

Jul 20, 2010 07:26

Title: What Happens In The Van, Really Won't Stay There
Rating: PG-13
Pairing/character: McGee/DiNozzo
Summary: "Could you, I don’t know, could you whistle or something?" "You want me to put my lips together and blow, Probie?"
Warnings/Spoilers: Implication of semi-public urination
A/N: Little dialogue only piece written for Kink_Bingo. Prompt is ( Read more... )

fic, ncis, one shot

Comments 23

ebonyfeather July 20 2010, 19:35:20 UTC

That was great- you had their voices and squabbling down perfectly.

Loved it.

my_young_friend July 20 2010, 20:14:08 UTC

Aww, cute icon!

Thank you, I'm really pleased the characterisation came out because, with these two, half of their personality is in their banter.

ex_hellesof July 20 2010, 19:55:52 UTC

This was hilarious. Great read. Would love to see that night!

my_young_friend July 20 2010, 20:15:11 UTC

Thank you! Me too, preferably in Hi-Def!

sakinow July 20 2010, 23:23:10 UTC

lol was never a more apt comment. I was laughing so much I woke the cat (ordinarily only thunderstorms, or the whisper of the fridge opening, will wake her). Look forward to reading more from you!

my_young_friend July 21 2010, 19:50:58 UTC

Oh dear, do apologise to your cat for me!

More is in the works, just needs the final sign-off from the beta and it's good to go!

sexycazzy July 21 2010, 10:09:13 UTC

That was hilarious! I loved it!

my_young_friend July 21 2010, 19:51:24 UTC

So glad you did! Thank you.

karaokegal July 22 2010, 04:16:37 UTC

Excellent. I hadn't read the notes, so I didn't even realize it was a dialogue only fic till I was done reading it. You had the voices down perfectly and I could see everything without any descriptions.

my_young_friend July 22 2010, 21:10:54 UTC

They've got such wonderfully different voices that I love playing with them. Glad you liked it!