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my_daroga

Fanfiction: Like Everybody Else (1/11) - Phantom of the Opera

Nov 27, 2010 18:22

Title: Like Everybody Else (1/11)
Fandom: Phantom of the Opera (Leroux, Kay)
Rating: Mature
Words: ~46,000
Summary: A sequel to the events of the novel, Christine returns to Erik to live as his wife. But the promises Erik made are difficult to keep, and a kiss is not enough.
Notes: Thanks to

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fanfiction: phantom of the opera, fanfiction: erik/christine, fanfiction: persian

Comments 6

finncullen November 28 2010, 10:08:26 UTC

Splendid, as I anticipated it would be. Your authorial note raised a point I have considered myself: you say that in his self-awareness, Erik sounds like Kay's Erik. To an extent, yes, but I think that's almost inevitable. Writing internal dialogue for Leroux's Erik is damn near impossible since the man was a complete nutjob. The only inner life you can give him that is lucid does tend to be, given what we know of his mind, analytical and self-aware - which always reminds one of Kay. The few times I've written Erik from a first-person POV myself I've encountered the same issue, and done my best to leave him looking like Leroux on the outside even if his thoughts are themselves a little more ordered (and commenting on his own behaviour ( ... )

my_daroga November 30 2010, 19:21:48 UTC

I'm not sure I'd do Erik first-person these days. I'm not sure. But it's one of the reasons for posting--a complete re-write, at this point, would mean a story different enough from this one that both might conceivably stand on their own.

So thank you kindly for your thoughts--very appreciated!

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my_daroga December 5 2010, 00:54:59 UTC

Revising it would have made it an entirely different story--I finally realized that (six years removed) when I got to the point where I knew I could write it "again" and probably publish them next to each other without anyone saying they were the same. If that makes sense.

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my_daroga November 30 2010, 19:20:18 UTC

It's coming! Thank you.

obstinatrix December 14 2010, 12:57:36 UTC

Oh! I've never seen you write in first person before, so that was something cool I hadn't anticipated. It carries your writing very well. I have a real sense of this person despite not knowing who the hell he is apart from what i learned from your very helpful email, so that's a surefire check mark in the SUCCESS column, I think. ;)

Awesome! Will read the rest later. xxx

my_daroga December 14 2010, 19:50:46 UTC

I don't think I'd make the same choice now, but it is interesting. Thanks for reading!