I wanted this to be hot sex. Then when that didn't quite pan out, I was hoping for side-splittingly funny.
Sadly, it's rather predictable and too meta for my taste.
The question is, can this story be saved?
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heart to heart | xander. ron. bass ale. | 810 words )
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I'll work on it. Thanks.
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But on the subject at hand --
The banter between the two of them is great, but I think they each guard thier supernatural closets a bit too closely to be like this on the first meeting... unles, say, Xander was supposed to meet Willow at said bar and such-and-such a time, and three hours later it's become very drunk out and they're still talking.
Of course, that could also lead to hot sex. But it'd make it a somewhat longer piece.
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Mmm...happy repressed tweedy English place... *g*
but I think they each guard thier supernatural closets a bit too closely to be like this on the first meeting... unles, say, Xander was supposed to meet Willow at said bar and such-and-such a time, and three hours later it's become very drunk out and they're still talking.
Yeah, the consensus seems to be there needs to be more banter. I can do that. I think. *G*
Thanks.
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