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msgenevieve

Redux - Michael/Sara (R)

Apr 25, 2008 00:38

Title: Redux (1/1)
Pairing: Michael/Sara
Genre: Het, AU
Length: 4,553 words
Rating: R
Summary:If you're lost, the best way to find yourself is to retrace your steps. Contains spoilers and dialogue from #119 "The Key", vague spoilers for Season Three and wild speculation for Season Four.
Author's Note:This story arose out of an email exchange with ( Read more... )

prison break, au, r, michael/sara, het, spoilers

Comments 59

chatty_cat April 24 2008, 15:17:31 UTC

Hi. I commented on one of your posts yesterday. I'm new so I'm pretty sure you won't remember me.

I was looking forward to when you would write a scene like this. I really loved how you tied it into the kiss from season 1. I think it showed how their relationship progressed, but still was completely based off of that time together. Everything stemmed from the infirmary and even though they are in such a different place in every sense of the word, the infirmary is still with them.

Also, this was my favorite part. It had me laughing, and I'm really not sure why. It was great though.

"Her face grows warm, she reaches for the first aid kit as the front door opens. "You're a very demanding patient, Mr Scofield," she murmurs,her fingers clumsy as she flicks through packets of gauze, butterflies arcing joyfully through her belly.

His hand tightens around hers, his slow smile one of promise. "You have no idea." "

msgenevieve April 25 2008, 02:05:29 UTC

*waves*

I remember you quite well - your username makes me smile every time I see it. I'm a bit behind in replying to comments this week, thanks to trying to spend more time unpacking boxes than I do online, so you'll have to forgive my tardiness. *g* It's nice to meet you!

Everything stemmed from the infirmary and even though they are in such a different place in every sense of the word, the infirmary is still with them.

Thank you so much. That's pretty much what I was trying to convey, lol! It's always something of a shock to remember that only a few months have passed in PB time, rather than the 3.5 years we've had to wait. It was only a few months ago that they were flirting in the infirmary over his daily shots. *g*

chatty_cat April 25 2008, 13:50:23 UTC

Thanks for remembering *waves back*.

Sometimes I think that it is even a shock to the writers that only a few months have passed. I get the feeling that they seem to forget that little fact as well.

Oh, can I add you to my friends list? You are one of my favorite authors, so I'd love to be able to see all your updates.

msgenevieve April 27 2008, 11:44:42 UTC

Sometimes I think that it is even a shock to the writers that only a few months have passed. I get the feeling that they seem to forget that little fact as well.

Yes, well *coughs*

Oh, can I add you to my friends list? You are one of my favorite authors, so I'd love to be able to see all your updates.

Oh, please, friend away!

eight8toes April 24 2008, 15:47:56 UTC

"Gooseflesh blossoms in the wake of his touch"

Woah! Imagery very poweful!

I love this idea... "They need to rewind and start again, she decides, to go back to where it started falling apart and see if they can get it right this time." You managed to give us exactly that, plus kissing and touching. :D And, you added snippets of missing info.

You are ranking pretty high in my "favorite person of the day" chart, right now, lol.

msgenevieve April 25 2008, 02:11:51 UTC

*blushes*

Awww, thanks. I love fleshing out canon scenes, and I've always wanted to do this one properly, rather than just refer to it in passing. I'm so glad you approved! :)

sticks_for_legs April 24 2008, 16:28:27 UTC

ah, I needed that. A little affirmation of their connection. Loved the tension, and the absolute need for intimacy but not necessarily sex, they'll get their eventually, just not on a couch, maybe a field, next to a car, fully clothed though, you never know. ; )

msgenevieve April 25 2008, 02:12:31 UTC

Loved the tension, and the absolute need for intimacy but not necessarily sex, they'll get their eventually, just not on a couch, maybe a field, next to a car, fully clothed though, you never know

Heh. I'm sure I've read that somewhere. *g* Happy you enjoyed!

telperaca April 24 2008, 18:03:06 UTC

Honestly, I really love this!
It's beautifully written and very adorably romantic.
I have to say, their first kiss on S! was one of my favourite moments, so I was positively beaming to see you'd written an extension from the scene!! You are Queen!
I enjoyed the second part too; I've got flutter-flies roaming my stomach for the unfinished business which had started! It's had the perfect level of romance without turning into over-fluff.
Really well done; loved it!
:)

msgenevieve April 25 2008, 02:13:17 UTC

I've got flutter-flies roaming my stomach for the unfinished business which had started! It's had the perfect level of romance without turning into over-fluff.

*grins*

Thank you very much - that's high praise as far as I'm concerned.

purplemoongrl April 24 2008, 18:10:11 UTC

I am so happy that you wrote something because it feels like it has been ages.

Usually I find recreation of existing scenes or 'fleshing out' kind of boring because we all know the dialog by heart, but never when you do it. Your attention to every little detail and the fact that as a bonus you are inside their heads always makes it extra special because you are just so magnificent at that. Michael and Sara are so subtle with every movement and their eyes that it is pure pleasure to see you translate that for us readers.

The end of that kiss scene was interpreted by many as a rejection but like in your story I always thought that she actually meant yes, I will wait for you but we can not do this NOW.

Last night, before he'd put her to bed, he hadn't been able to stop touching her - her hand, her shoulder, her face - as if he couldn't believe she was real. This morning, though, there seems to be a new constraint between them. “How are you feeling?”This is the reason I am such a big fan of your writing because IMO you understand ( ... )

msgenevieve April 25 2008, 02:16:58 UTC

I am so happy that you wrote something because it feels like it has been ages.

Oh, me too! I've just been so stressed about the move, the writing part of my brain has been in stasis, I think. *sighs*

Your attention to every little detail and the fact that as a bonus you are inside their heads always makes it extra special because you are just so magnificent at that. Michael and Sara are so subtle with every movement and their eyes that it is pure pleasure to see you translate that for us readers.

Perhaps because I'm anal about little details to an embarrassingly scary degree? LOL.

After so much (mental) foreplay I am now pretty sure that the first time they are really on their own together they both going to explode. So for S4 I'd say; let there be a lot of neck kissing and bring on the tatts!!!!Well, look at #216. They'd barely had the chance to talk, and yet put them in a room with a closed door? They were kissing within seconds. The thought of what they might manage to achieve if they have more than five minutes alone is a ( ... )