At one point while revising this story, I was cutting out so much that I thought it might end up shorter than the original
I'm so glad it didn't, hee! The longer the better! As with all of you TH series (revised and original), this one was just as engrossing and beautifully done.
I loved the little details you've added - my favourite being Nymph-adore. Remus is in fine form in this edition - alternating between his mischievous self and his tendency to second-guess at times. You've done well with that - you keep your characters in line with their nature - without overdoing one single aspect. Its one of your strengths
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You know, I very nearly didn't do the Nymph-adore bit, because I was afraid it would be too corny, so I'm really relieved and pleased you liked that bit so much! I do think Remus wouldn't be able to resist the awful pun every now and again, and you'd better believe it'll be returning in the future to annoy Tonks. ;)
Thanks for your lovely comments. I'm just so pleased you feel these revisions are establishing a better story progression.
Oh, I'll never stop smiling like an idiot...it happens every time I read one of your fics... Wonderful... I wish I had your talent in writing, your stories are always amazing!
This was wonderful! I love all the new elements you added to the story--you certainly have a knack for revision. I think my favorite part is the idea of Remus looking scrummy with his sexy stubble and beans smeared all over his pajamas. You got both him and Tonks exactly right in this one; their playfulness that hides underlying insecurity was dead on. Can't wait to read more! :)
Thank you very much! I'm really glad you think Remus and Tonks are pitched right in this one. It was really interesting to explore ways they might be similar in an outward show of confidence hiding inner insecurity. And of course I'm pleased you like scruffy, pajama-clad Remus. I certainly had fun keeping that image in mind throughout the fic. ;)
Aww. I have a real soft spot for post-moon stories (and the trust issues that necessarily arise therein), and this is a lovely one. I enjoyed the touches of humour, especially Remus feeling silly about being less in control of his words than usual (that's an original and creative post-transformation malady!). The dialogue on the stairs is fantastic, the way they keep interrupting each other -- it feels very natural. And the detailed description of the wreckage of the beans on toast made me chuckle. But I also really like what you've done with Tonks and her insecurities. This is a great setup for the HBP-era problems these two are going to face, and I thought that foreshadowing it here works really well. And then, to go out on a Marauderish note makes for a great ending!
Well I have a real fear of writing post-moon stories, and I have been unsatisfied with a lot of the way I handled it in early fics, so I'm very, very pleased to know you think it works here. I'm so intrigued by this idea of Remus liking to be liked, and lately I've been thinking about how poised he is, and how charming, and just how good with people in general. He really knows how to make people like him, and a lot of that may be natural but I also can't help but think he's very conscious of what face he puts on, which is part of what gives him so much trouble in HBP, it's so hard, he just can't hide from the people he loves, so he isolates himself. Anyway, bit of a tangent I suppose, but I really do appreciate your feedback and am so pleased this both entertained you and foreshadowed some of those issues to come! Thanks very much for your lovely words. They really mean a lot from you. :)
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I'm so glad it didn't, hee! The longer the better! As with all of you TH series (revised and original), this one was just as engrossing and beautifully done.
I loved the little details you've added - my favourite being Nymph-adore. Remus is in fine form in this edition - alternating between his mischievous self and his tendency to second-guess at times. You've done well with that - you keep your characters in line with their nature - without overdoing one single aspect. Its one of your strengths ( ... )
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