At one point while revising this story, I was cutting out so much that I thought it might end up shorter than the original
I'm so glad it didn't, hee! The longer the better! As with all of you TH series (revised and original), this one was just as engrossing and beautifully done.
I loved the little details you've added - my favourite being Nymph-adore. Remus is in fine form in this edition - alternating between his mischievous self and his tendency to second-guess at times. You've done well with that - you keep your characters in line with their nature - without overdoing one single aspect. Its one of your strengths.
You've covered so many issues in this installment - some in detail, and others hinting at what is to come.
When you told me that you wanted to work on the development of their relationship upto the point it is at the end of HBP - well, I'll say you've set the pace perfectly. They're making all the right steps in the right time - without being rushed or way too slow. Wonderful work there, hon. I can see this building up at the right pace with all emotions and actions right in place.
You know, I very nearly didn't do the Nymph-adore bit, because I was afraid it would be too corny, so I'm really relieved and pleased you liked that bit so much! I do think Remus wouldn't be able to resist the awful pun every now and again, and you'd better believe it'll be returning in the future to annoy Tonks. ;)
Thanks for your lovely comments. I'm just so pleased you feel these revisions are establishing a better story progression.
I'm so glad it didn't, hee! The longer the better! As with all of you TH series (revised and original), this one was just as engrossing and beautifully done.
I loved the little details you've added - my favourite being Nymph-adore. Remus is in fine form in this edition - alternating between his mischievous self and his tendency to second-guess at times. You've done well with that - you keep your characters in line with their nature - without overdoing one single aspect. Its one of your strengths.
You've covered so many issues in this installment - some in detail, and others hinting at what is to come.
When you told me that you wanted to work on the development of their relationship upto the point it is at the end of HBP - well, I'll say you've set the pace perfectly. They're making all the right steps in the right time - without being rushed or way too slow. Wonderful work there, hon. I can see this building up at the right pace with all emotions and actions right in place.
Enjoyed this, just as I knew I would :)
Cheers, love!
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Thanks for your lovely comments. I'm just so pleased you feel these revisions are establishing a better story progression.
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