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Moving Forward (1/?) - Free to Go

Jul 29, 2014 17:50

Title Free to Go
Story Moving Forward (1/?)
Author morganfm
Characters River Song, Other Character(s)
Rating All Ages
Disclaimer Just playing around in the BBC's sandbox. If you recognize it, it's unfortunately not mine.
Genre General, Missing Scene
Archived at AO3, FF.net, & Teaspoon
Summary The Warden of Stormcage Containment Facility has some news for ( Read more... )

fanfic, c- river song, nanowrimo, series- something wonderful and strange, story- moving forward, c- oc, doctor who

Comments 12

a_phoenixdragon July 30 2014, 01:36:17 UTC

Eeeee!! Off to read at Teaspoon and SQUEE!!

*RUNS*

*Drive-by Squishes!!*

morganfm July 30 2014, 18:17:25 UTC

*gratefully accepts the driveby squishies*

shivver13 July 31 2014, 04:08:48 UTC

Woohoo! Congrats on your first fanfic! Isn't it a wonderful feeling? Here's my review ( ... )

morganfm July 31 2014, 15:40:57 UTC

thank you so so so incredibly much for this wonderfully helpful and in depth review ( ... )

shivver13 August 1 2014, 02:17:54 UTC

Mmm! They were virtually delicious! Thanks ( ... )

morganfm August 1 2014, 02:48:12 UTC

I like it! I did tweak a few things earlier when I fixed the spacing issue, I'll have another look later and see what more can be done. I am semi-familiar with the Brig via the Sarah Jane Adventures and various fanfics, but I might go back and see some of his classic who stuff since I need to watch more of that anyway!
thanks again for all your help love! If you ever need betaing or anything, all ya gotta do is ask- I'd love to return the favor X)
::smishes you!::

Thread 6

pinguthegreek July 31 2014, 19:33:59 UTC

I really enjoyed this but there was one thing that jarred as a Brit was River using the word gotten. I am not sure she would, because she speaks in quite a formal way. Other than that, I thoroughly enjoyed it. I would just say be careful when you're writing for a British English speaking character because it would be a shame to spoil great writing with a word or phrase that might be out of place.

morganfm July 31 2014, 19:49:44 UTC

thanks for the Britpicking! I do appreciate it. I've tried my best to write in character but as a lowly Texan teenager I do slip up occasionally. I've changed it to "received". anything else in particular that stood out?

pinguthegreek July 31 2014, 19:52:05 UTC

Nothing that stood out. If you ever want a Britpicker, let me know!

morganfm July 31 2014, 20:03:07 UTC

I'd love that! Thanks!
Would you be interested in doing so regularly? If you PM me your email I could send you things I'm done with before I post them. It wouldn't be all that incredibly often- I'm not even finished with the second chapter yet.
thanks again for your help luv! :)