[FANFIC] HIS

[mimpikita]

Title: His
Genre: AU, Drama, Romance
Warning: Homosexuality, Violence
Main Pairing: YunJae (YunHo/JaeJoong)
Summary: His father sold him to a casino owner when he was 10 to settle debts and he'd been working ever since. Weak due to his asthma and barely 16, a stranger take interest in him and bought him after hearing him sing just once. What now?

Comments

[yseia]

awww.... yunjae progress... slow but at least it's there =p

this is so sweet! and yunho be starting to open up and care about jaejoong's emotional wellbeing aside from his physical needs. love it!

[mimpikita]

Thank you. Slow but steady is better isn't it?
Thank you again. Glad you think so.
Thank you for reading and commenting.

[mimpikita]

Thank you. I'm glad you think so.
Thank you for reading and commenting.

[mimpikita]

Thank you. Of course he is. Thank you. Glad you like it. I hope you don't mind waiting because there's a big possibility I won't be updating again these 2 days. Sorry.
Thank you for reading and commenting.

[hitomi2oo7]

OMG! I cried together with Jae at the end TT^TT
Yunho You sweet and stubborn-dense man lol
Jae You are also dense so You and Your Master are a perfect pair for each other xDDD
I love Yoochun in this story coz he ships YunJae just like Yoochun do in real life too kekekeke~
Thank You for the hard work like always~! ^o^

[mimpikita]

You did? Thank you.
He's just usually not a man with a heart so it's hard for him to understand of course.
And JaeJoong had been conditioned with his stay in the casino so much that he can't understand the good truth behind YunHo's action. The idea od someone, especially his master, loving his 'unworthy' sickly self will never crossed his mind as possible.
I guess so.
Welcome. I'm always happy to see your comment.
Thank you for reading and commenting.
P.S.: Just a hands up. I will not be updating these 2 days. I hope you won't mind waiting until Monday for an update.

[hitomi2oo7]

gurl I sometimes need to wait half a year for an update from my favorite YJ FF xDDD Believe me I won't mind to wait. You also need a rest to recharge after whole week of hard work! ^^~ Just relax and enjoy Your free time ;3

[mimpikita]

Haha. Trust me, I know your feeling. I'd wait about 2 years I guess for an update for a fic. But I think she'd suspended or given up that fic already. I'll wait, but I'm starting to gather negative emotion as well the longer I wait.
Thank you. I have a lot of tests this week and the next so that's why I want to enjoy my weekends and try to study. But it's hard because I keep itching to write this fic. Muse is too hyped up I guess.
Thank you.

[harunotenshi]

fluff!

yunho is way too closed and guarded to really grasp and understand jaejoong... jaejoong is... well, he's the same... tho it's his naivety that hinders him from seeing what yoochun sees in both him and yunho...

i think the secret place where the fireflies are is the best birthday present for jae... it's something personal and something that the two of them can share~

question: is english your first language? i understand if it's not. if it is... i'd like to tell you to watch out for your grammar. i've noticed it since the first chapter. you've got to be careful of sentence constructions and the verbs you use in your sentences... though the thought you want to convey is there~^^ this is just minor, but it won't hurt to double check~^^

anyway, this was a fluffy and sweet update~ i wanna read more and finally know when yunho and jaejoong will become closer~^^ hope you update again soon!

[mimpikita]

I guess?
Yes. I believe so, JaeJoong had been too 'conditioned' with how he's supposed to see the world from his stay in casino so it's hard to understand the truth behind YunHo's action meant.
I believe so too.
NO. That is why as I'd said in my notes for the readers, I would like anyone to point out any mistakes I'd done. Nobody said anything yet but I'm very peculiar about those because I don't believe in my English at all. I could use a beta but I'm new and I don't know anyone. Sorry. Is English yours? Can you kindly point or explain to me? You should know grammar is my worse part in my English. I don't think I'll be able to correct anything even if I double check.
Thank you. Glad you think so. They are already getting closer. I'll try but there's a big possibility I will not update in these 2 days time.
Thank you for reading and commenting.

[harunotenshi]

so that's how it is~^^ i had a feeling that english wasn't your first language... plus, i kinda skipped that warning cause i was so eager to read the story~ sorry about that... >.>

anyway, english isn't my first language either but i can try and help you out~^^ the mistakes are commonly the verb tenses you use and a few misspelled words... like this:

"YooChun hyung... How long have you work for Master?"

the verb you should've used should've been in the past tense, 'worked'

and here:

"...ou might not realise it but I'd never seen him cared for anyone who's not family as much as he'd cared for you..."

this should be 'I've' because the sentence is talking in the present tense.

don't worry too much tho~ your mistakes, like i said are minor and few. believe me when i say i've seen worse~^^

[mimpikita]

I thought it's obvious. Oh, it's not in the warning. It's in my other post, things I'd like the readers to know. The first entry anyone would see if they open my LJ. It's okay. I have a feeling not many, if there's any at all, who read 'a note to my readers' post.
Ah, it's not? Thank you though. Though I understand 'worked', I'm not sure about 'I've' cause my teacher allowed us to use 'I'd' OR 'I've' in this kind of sentence. Still, I had corrected the 2, do tell if there's anymore. Thank you. I was expecting more mistakes though.
I know. But I'm just a bit peculiar about it. Sorry. And trust me, I believe you when you said you'd seen worse. I had read a few fics that even to me, who's English is not her first language, it's too cringe-worthy.
Again. THANK YOU.