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Amateur Fanfiction Ahoy!

Sep 30, 2009 21:23

Title: Dolly
Pairing: Snake/Otacon (If you think really hard about the last little bit and squint and hope)
Rating: G so, so, G
Warnings: Sucky writing? Uh... first fic for me in this series. And like my fourth fanfiction ever. (Concrit is welcome!)
Note: Thanks a TON to origin_blue and yamitami for beta reading this for me. (As did my boyfriend. ( Read more... )

fanfic, 2009, snake/otacon

Comments 14

sarahofcroydon October 1 2009, 03:09:56 UTC

D'awwwww. I really liked reading this. Especially something about those two watching Mythbusters (and vaguely echoing Adam and Jamie :P)

thelonebamf October 1 2009, 03:13:20 UTC

I was chatting with a buddy about the two when he asked me what tv show I thought they would watch together. I answered "Mythbusters" with no hesitation, then sort of paled as I realized what an appropriate answer that was. (Explosions, science, available on basic networks...) Had to work it in. :)

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thelonebamf October 1 2009, 21:53:45 UTC

Thank you for that. I'm glad you liked the ending. I was writing exponentially slower as the story went on (and trying to find a sweet-but-not-too-sappy way of ending it) so I'm glad that the work paid off. ^_^

origin_blue October 1 2009, 07:35:41 UTC

You already know I like it, but aww, it's so cute!

thelonebamf October 1 2009, 21:52:28 UTC

Thank you (again)! Your input was really helpful!

<--ICON athenemiranda October 1 2009, 08:23:53 UTC

Nice work - the conversation flows pretty well, and it's so good to see fic that pokes at all those reaction shots to Dolly's cloning, as that's something canon doesn't tend to worry about too much - people's reactions to all the mad scientist stuff wandering around. Clone angst+Snake as a Metal Gear, yaaay.

I really liked this line, for some reason: "Just because TIME wasn’t devoting a twelve-page spread to techno-terrors didn’t mean they weren’t out there."

Re: <--ICON thelonebamf October 1 2009, 21:51:42 UTC

Thank you for that! I had to tinker with that paragraph a lot because originally it was really clunky. I appreciate the fact that there was something there you liked!

mushroom18 October 1 2009, 13:50:01 UTC

Awwww! Such a sensitive topic. Loved this!

thelonebamf October 2 2009, 17:45:35 UTC

Thank you, that's very encouraging! Hopefully my next will be as entertaining for you all. :D