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The Missing Marks Chapter 2

Jul 19, 2007 22:37

Title: The Missing Marks Chapter 2
Author: patriot_jackie
Rating and Warnings: PG-13 for future violence
Prompt: Signature
Word Count: 3,933
Summary: One year after becoming an Auror, Tonks is presented with her first real case: the mystery of a series of signature crimes marked by a countdown of obsidian crystals and strange notes. - A series of ( Read more... )

romance, mystery/suspense, last chance full moon showdown, action/adventure, patriot_jackie

Comments 15

et13 July 20 2007, 08:34:59 UTC

I am, clearly, not a detective. =P I hope that you know more about these clues than we do cause I'm as confused as Kingsley! =)

fantasticjackie July 26 2007, 02:30:55 UTC

Oh no! Can I help with anything? Or do you mean that you don't know where these clues are going? - Cuz if you mean the latter, then that's all good. 8) I certainly do know more about these clues. (Though I do fear losing my outline pages... O_O)

Thanks for reading! ;)

et13 July 26 2007, 06:34:02 UTC

The latter, in a good way! :)

lady_bracknell July 20 2007, 16:43:57 UTC

I loved spy/mystery novels when I was little, so I'm really enjoying this. You've got the pace absolutely spot-on, and you've created a real sense of anticipation about the crime which has effectively blended the idea of magical means but real crimes - Tonks puzzling out the notes, for example.

I'm really looking forward to the rest and seeing it unfold.

fantasticjackie July 26 2007, 02:35:10 UTC

Thank yeh! At the moment, I feel as if I've left the R/T part of this behind, but I'm glad the plot is coming along nicely. - I just can't wait until the two pieces hook up together.

I'll try to get it updated soon - the third chapter will be up soonish, at least. But DH, it seems, has had an effect on me..... ;)

mrstater July 24 2007, 02:09:39 UTC

The code with the music was awesome, and the chase was great, too! You do this so well.

Of course, I just want to know how Remus recognized her. ;)

I do hope you'll keep writing this and post it on your LJ.

fantasticjackie July 26 2007, 02:41:27 UTC

Glad you thought so; I've still not quite sold myself that I didn't spend too much time on the clues and enough on the chase. - Which isn't over. lol

But speaking of the chase... DH made me worry a bit: can they not Apparate/Disapparate inside Diagon Alley? I don't recall reading anything, but when the Trio went to Gringotts, they Apparated to right outside the Leaky Cauldron...

I expect that I'll be distracted by my DH fic for a bit, but the third chapter of this has already been re-written/adapted or whatever from my little brainstorm. ;)

morrighangw July 25 2007, 07:48:22 UTC

Ya know, some elements of this are oddly reminiscent of some other things you've written...hmm, I wonder why... =P

*is hexed*

XD Anyways...

I love where you're taking this - the clues, the government cover ups, the awesomely detailed descriptions... What more could we ask for? =D

fantasticjackie July 26 2007, 02:46:25 UTC

Indeed, I do wonder... =P

Maybe you could ask for a little more actual R/T... >.> It's coming, but you know how I am. ;)

morrighangw July 26 2007, 02:59:38 UTC

LOL. That I do. =D

gilpin25 July 27 2007, 16:26:15 UTC

Apologies for being late with this, for some strange reason it's been a bit hectic for the last week and a bit. ;)

I'm also now cunningly trying to do a two-chapters-in-one-review as I've just read them both together (so obviously no complaints from me about the evil cliffie to end One, not so sure about Two;)). I loved the start which took you straight into the mystery with no messing around, and then concentrated on filling me in timewise, and what Tonks was thinking character-wise, and who else was going to be around. It's a great way to hook the reader and you really paced it well ( ... )

fantasticjackie July 31 2007, 04:27:50 UTC

Ha! You don't know late. I'm struggling to keep up with everything and failing miserably. ;) I've yet to review anything here...

Thank you very much! I love writing the openings of these stories to be palpable in the goings-on of the story as much to grab the reader's attention as it is to grab my own.

I've no idea who Agatha Christie is, but thank you! I'll check out her books. ;) The R/T is so slow right now for me, but it is tantalising, as you put it, and I just can't wait to really get into it!

I am going to keep up with it. Soon as I get a spare moment of typing time, I'll post the third chapter on ff.net and my jorunal. I now have 4 WIPs, though... O_O