Serpents, Chapter 1

[mrstater]

Title: Serpents (1/?)
Author: MrsTater
Rating & Warnings: R for sexuality
Prompts: weakness; "In the light of Voldemort's return, we are only as strong as we are united, as weak as we are divided."
Word Count: 7412
Summary: Two years into a relationship with Remus, and the correct way to deal with full moons continues to elude Tonks, dredging up her

Comments

[scarlett71177]

What an evil cliffie!

Great update, however. I love the hint at a blossoming relationship between Molly and Tonks here; it's a lovely addition to the storyline. I like Kingsley's 'interference' as well. It makes them seem equally co-worker and friend, which is a nice thought.

Hyacinths? Bracelets? Showing up outside her flat? *swoons* Fetch me the smelling salts!

Great update, chica.

[mrstater]

Will you take back the evil bit if I tell you I didn't mean for there to be a cliffie there, but the flashbacks made it long so I needed to cut the chapter? ;)

Thanks very much for reading, and I'm really pleased that the between-the-lines Molly-Tonks relationship came through even in the midst of a lot of information. I've always written Molly as taking Tonks under her wing at first sight, but I decided to change that for this one, because there's a little hint of another dynamic in OOTP, and I thought it would be fun to develop several of Tonks' relationships.

Glad you like the interaction with Kingsley, too. I'm having a great time writing him as almost a brother figure to Tonks, and developing how he might have come into the Order with this sort of relationship with her (and Remus, through her).

And of course it goes without saying that I'm glad Remus made you swoon. He's pleased, too. Liking to be liked, and all. ;)

Thank you again, so much!

[scarlett71177]

Oh I'm happy to forgive you- A. it's you! and B. I loooove evil cliffhangers.

;-)

Can't wait for Chapter 2

[katyhasclogs]

I'm realy enjoying this, and look forward to the next installment!

This is a really fresh take on the relationship during OotP. It's amazing how just changing one detail (i.e at what stage they get together first)can put a totally different slant on the progression of the relationship. I love how the snidgetsverse throws up a whole new set of complications for them.

I also really liked seeing Tonks' insecurities. Often it's only Remus who has worries, so its nice to see Tonks with a bit less confidence. It works especially well here as she's pretty inexperienced when it comes to relationships.

All in all a great read. Keep it up!

[mrstater]

What's turned out to be the most interesting part of writing this POA-based romance for me is exactly what you said: when they got together absolutely changes the issues they've got to encounter and what light that throws their relationship into. I'd always been intrigued by the idea of them having had a mostly secret relationship till HBP brought it in the open, and I was pleasantly surprised to have the POA events force them into secrecy. I'm so pleased you're liking this angle on things! I know it's unconventional, but I'm having so much fun with making it work

[oneandonlysusan]

Hi! I'm Susan, I'm sort of a lurking fan of your works :D Just wanted to let you know I'm really enjoying reading this! I loved Caring For Magical Creatures- it was such a believable concept for a PoA era romance. I really love the R/T interaction in your fics...It's just so natural. I also love the way you write Tonks' thoughts. I really do feel as if I'm inside her head, listening to her insecurities (and adoring Remus.) I'm looking forward to reading more!
-Susan

[mrstater]

Aw, thank you so much! I'm so pleased you like the Caring For Magical Creatures storyline -- it's still in progress, btw, just have been a bit delayed by this and that, and this fic will eventually be absorbed into it. I have a lot of fun writing Tonks' inner voice in this way, and it's good to know you enjoy it and feel what she does as you read! I really appreciate your feedback!

[cae_prince]

That was an evil cliffie! I'm sorry I wasn't in sooner to review this

[mrstater]

Please forgive me for being so very remiss about replying to this review. I've been working on the next chapter like mad, trying to get this thing finished before the deadline, and RL has been a bit hectic, too

[tweedledani]

This fic is amazing. I guess I've been so used to reading R/T fics where Tonks must be right because she so obviously loves him and Remus' problems and issues are mostly in his head or made negligible if the two of them really work at the relationship. I love how you this early part of their relationship helps create/augment all the reasons Remus would have for being insecure later on and explains the "being noble" bit. I love how Tonks doesn't see herself as noble. I adored the Molly, Hestia, Tonks interactions. and Kingsley is awesome. Absolutely wonderful. That bit about each waning moon being a new chance for their relationship was beautiful, poetic really. Anyway, I'm looking forward to more. (Oh and thanks for telling me about the other fics set in this version of their relationship I loved them.)

[mrstater]

I am so sorry I'm so delayed in replying to your review. Your comments are so lovely, and I really, really appreciate them. This style of letting a story unfold by flashback is new to me as a writer, but I had to do it because I'd jumped so far ahead in the timeline for the actual story, so I'm really pleased you like it. These characterizations are a lot of fun, and it really does intrigue me that just getting them together earlier changes so many things and yet still works with the OotP/HBP timelines. Glad you think it's realistic! And I'm glad the supporting characters are working for you, too. I do like writing other people for Remus and Tonks to interact with, and for some reason that's especially true of annoying characters vs. Tonks.

I've finished the first draft of chapter two, so hopefully you'll be seeing it later today!

Thanks again, so, so much.