Serpents, Chapter 1

[mrstater]

Title: Serpents (1/?)
Author: MrsTater
Rating & Warnings: R for sexuality
Prompts: weakness; "In the light of Voldemort's return, we are only as strong as we are united, as weak as we are divided."
Word Count: 7412
Summary: Two years into a relationship with Remus, and the correct way to deal with full moons continues to elude Tonks, dredging up her

Comments

[cae_prince]

That was an evil cliffie! I'm sorry I wasn't in sooner to review this.

First of all, I want to commend you on the amount of research you put in before writing this installment. It shows your commitment and dedication to your writing.

I'm glad to see Tonks and Remus resolving their break up here. Tonks' realizations of Remus' true intentions in keeping things from her is the pivotal moment in this story. And you've carried it out with your usual aplomb!

Kingsley, like Remus is good on the advice (though, of course Remus is par excellence on that score ;) ). There's some similarity between those two and it shows clearly here. Its not surprising that Kingsley has figured out the true nature of the relationship between Remus and Tonks.

I've said time and time again that you work very well with symbolism. The significance of the flowers and the runes on the bracelet are a wonderful piece of excellence on your part.

Also, Tonks insecurities surfacing during her trek in the woods, tempered by an annoying Hestia and a soothing Molly set the right balance for the story, especially when you're trying to bring out Tonks' first experiences with the Order when she's trying so hard to impress.

Can't wait to see if Remus is OK!

*goes back to ogling at the new manip in Wolf and Lady*

[mrstater]

Please forgive me for being so very remiss about replying to this review. I've been working on the next chapter like mad, trying to get this thing finished before the deadline, and RL has been a bit hectic, too!

But I really do appreciate your always thoughtful comments and observations, and I'm delighted you're liking how this unfolds. I'm glad you like the reconciliation and Tonks' relationship with Kingsley -- he's a character I want to do a lot with because as I've gotten to know these characters better, I think it's so admirable that he and Tonks would be in the Order, because they really do risk so much to do it; she's a wonderful person, we know, but so must he be to circumvent the law in all the ways he does.

I'm so glad you liked the runes and flowers, too; the runes came to me out of the blue when I couldn't find gemstones I was totally satisfied with, though I can't remember now what thought took me to runes. You shall be seeing more of them. ;)

As for your wait to see if Remus will be okay...I'll hopefully get a new chapter up today. Fingers crossed the tweaking goes quickly.

Thank you again, very much. :)