Comments | metamorfic_moon: How it feels

sugarannie in metamorfic_moon

How it feels

Jun 14, 2007 20:23

Title: How it feels
Author: Sugarannie
Rating & Warnings:PG
Prompts: pain
Word Count:283 words
Summary: Tonks is pondering about different ways of feeling pain.
Author’s Notes: I had the idea for this from the beginning, and yet this is the third version. Still not entirely happy with it, but I hope you like it anyway...

( How it feels )

last chance full moon showdown, angst, sugarannie

Comments 13

author_by_night June 14 2007, 21:11:56 UTC

Very sad... though I would like more background. Is this about HBP? Or another event in which he could not help?

sugarannie June 15 2007, 07:12:38 UTC

Well, I did think to talk about HBP...sorry if that's not clear. You're right, I never say so anywhere...

sea_thoughts June 14 2007, 21:52:21 UTC

I can see why it took you a while to get this idea onto paper because you wanted it to be exactly right. This definitely reminds me of times when I've been so upset that I can't think of anything or anyone else but the thing or person that's upset me, even when I want to. If you're not satisifed, keep working on it, but this version reads pretty well.

sugarannie June 15 2007, 07:13:35 UTC

Thank you for commenting!
I think I'll leave it at that, for otherwise I'll probably just make it worse than it is now...

gijane7702 June 15 2007, 17:08:56 UTC

It just makes you want to kick Remus in the...

Which is the reaction you were probably looking for ;)

sugarannie June 15 2007, 20:57:47 UTC

Yeah, it's a great response...although I must admit that mine would probably be crying. I am too soft sometimes :-)

devonwood June 15 2007, 20:41:25 UTC

The last line is especially gripping. I love the emotion that you gave Tonks here. Very lovely work. I feel all sad now. :(

sugarannie June 15 2007, 20:58:35 UTC

Thank you for your comment.
I hope I didn't make you too sad...

phoenixfyre13 June 16 2007, 22:33:05 UTC

Lovely little piece of angst here. What I love most is the relating of that moment when you look back and go, "Two years ago, I would've", or "I never thought I would." That has happened so often to me, in relationships and other areas of my life, and really helped me create a connection with what Tonks is going through. You can always say you'd "never", but you never know until you're in that moment.

Good job! And way to express in so few words. Very difficult, and even harder sometimes than writing an epic.