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The Great Snowball War of 1995

Mar 06, 2007 14:49

Title: The Great Snowball War of 1995
Author: jenulus
Rating & Warnings: G, may need a Fluff warning.
Prompts: Pumpkin Juice, Sirius & Fred & George, Stop, Action/Adventure
Word Count: Fic; 4,282 words
Summary: She convinced him that not only did he want to win The Great Snowball War of 1995, he wanted Nymphadora to win every snowball war she ever ( Read more... )

action/adventure, jenulus, lovers' moon fic jumble

Comments 17

bratanimus March 6 2007, 23:37:54 UTC

Oh my goodness, how wonderful! This story was delightful. :D

I really loved all the snowball names you made up, and each one completely fit its "inventor."

Completely loved the shift from NotHiding!Remus (LOL) to SnowballSamurai!Remus. His monologue about strategy - the one that leaves Tonks speechless - was nothing short of hilarious. And it makes sense that he'd shift into instructor mode without a hitch. But I was especially tickled to see the young Marauder coming out so easily. And 37 isn't old at all. ;)

Tonks was simply a gem in this, as well. Loved the Ice Maiden appearance (very creative!), and I'm sure Remus was simply captivated, too. ;) I thought her own Marauder streak came across quite well.

The transition into his asking her out on a real date was just lovely. And how perfect that something as simple as a snowball fight with two teenagers would give him just the nudge he needed. And the way he asked her was so endearing, a very Hugh Grant movie sort of moment. :)

Just lovely. I really enjoyed this!

jenulus March 12 2007, 16:44:39 UTC

I loved NotHiding!Remus too... I just had this vision of Remus leaving the room when Tonks arrived and Sirius making some comment about him hiding from her, and that paragraph seems to be Remus' internal response. :)

I'm so pleased you liked this... it was fun to write, as they both have a very sly Marauder streak in them.

lady_bracknell March 8 2007, 14:28:08 UTC

This is utterly charming, and thoroughly enjoyable. I'm so pleased you eventually got a chance to write this.

I loved Remus in this, so proffessorial even about a snowball fight, and I adored Tonks being impressed by his Maruading tendancies. Fred and George's lin e at the end was priceless to, and the whole snowball fight was very inventive.

Bravo!

jenulus March 12 2007, 16:46:48 UTC

I'm glad it finally worked out too-- I was bummed after the Christmas advent not to have completed it... the jumble gods smiled, I guess. :)

I'm glad you liked it!

shimotsuki March 8 2007, 15:14:00 UTC

I loved this. Hooray for Remus, with unexpected snowball expertise! What a great way to show that he's still a Marauder. I cheered when he slipped seamlessly into snowball strategizing, even though it had been years since his last practical experience.

And this story has such a nice balance between slapstick and introspection, too -- whether it's Remus doubting himself, or suddenly remembering that they're really at war. As much fun as the snowball fight is, these contrasts give the piece extra depth.

jenulus March 12 2007, 16:48:34 UTC

Thanks for such a great review! I just loved the idea of him approaching teaching Tonks about enchanted snowballs the same way he approached teaching DADA, or strategizing for OotP. I'm glad you liked it!

jncar March 8 2007, 16:47:50 UTC

This is tons of fun!
I love seeing Remus in Marauder mode--but still with a touch of the Professor in him. And your creativity in creating all those enchanted snowballs is wonderful.

I also really liked your characterization of Remus--he was a great mixture of quick hymour and self-doubt. And it was great to see him get up the courage to ask her out in the end. :)

jenulus March 12 2007, 16:50:49 UTC

Thanks so much! I had a really fun time sitting down and trying to think of what everyone's signature snowball would look like... I loved the idea of Remus needing a way to shut Sirius & James up. :)

phe_o March 9 2007, 01:41:14 UTC

Oh, what a fantastic read!

The entire thing is marvelous--and the snowball action was fabulous!--but my favorite part has to be Remus seeking out some ancient book on mold that could be the very thing to defeat Voldemort. I had to stop reading and laugh for several minutes after that priceless paragraph!

Tonks' excuse to get Remus out, and Remus asking right when she was going to, is just SO them, and you completely nailed Remus throughout. Oh, and the lines about the snowball spell being out of date with the mullet--again, priceless! This was so enjoyable. I really, really loved it.

jenulus March 12 2007, 16:53:21 UTC

Oh, I'm SO glad you liked the plague mold. When I was thinking about what kind of book he would look for, that idea just came out of nowhere and I couldn't stop laughing myself. :) Thanks so much for such a great review!