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gilpin25 in metamorfic_moon

The Madness Within

Feb 10, 2007 22:02

Title: The Madness Within
Author: freakinwinky
Rating:PG-13
Prompt: Heart’s desire
Word count:Ficlet; 920
Warning:A bit of violence implied. Nothing too graphic.
Summary: “Men have wasted away in front of it; even gone mad…” Remus encounters the mirror of Erised. (HBP era)
Genre: Angst

( The Madness Within )

angst, freakinwinky, lovers' moon fic jumble

Comments 19

scarlett71177 February 11 2007, 00:42:07 UTC

Nice job.

I liked the use of this prompt and the style worked well. The images were very clear, and I think it meshes well with canon Remus.

Well done!

Amy

cae_prince February 11 2007, 01:45:09 UTC

Wonderful Use of the prompts. I like how you describe the situation so vividly, that one can almost feel Remus' desperation.
The inner battle in Remus plays out very convincingly - especially the part with Greyback.

Lovely work :)

devonwood February 11 2007, 03:03:30 UTC

I love the kind of jumbled, confusion in the formatting. It helps to convey Remus's thoughts-- how they are all jumbled and chaotic. Dumbledore "saving" Remus at the end was great as well. Nice job. :)

kerrymdb February 11 2007, 07:10:13 UTC

Oh the angst! I liked this a lot. The complete opposite of a loving Tonks and Greyback's head was chilling. I can't even imagine how conflicted Remus must feel right now. Good work! :)

phe_o February 11 2007, 08:38:03 UTC

Wonderful job, particularly the take on the prompt, and I love how you used Dumbledore's words about the mirror in the background of Remus' consciousness. When you show Tonks laughing with him at Greyback's death, it's almost as if one of his greatest desires is for her to embrace all of the darkness that is within him--within his lycanthropy and the entire world of it. In fact, there are so many meanings to this that it's poetic. A truly haunting and memorable work--nice job!