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What To Say

Feb 10, 2007 14:52

Title: What to Say
Author: shimotsuki
Format and Word Count: Ficlet, 897
Rating: G
Prompt: "Say Yes"
Summary: Remus worries that Tonks might have grand expectations.
Author's note: The Donne poem Remus has chosen is "Love's Growth."
Genre: Romantic comedy

( What to Say )

shimotsuki, romantic comedy, lovers' moon fic jumble

Comments 42

author_by_night February 10 2007, 15:05:59 UTC

I really liked this fanfic. Tonks's and Remus's characters were spot on, and I liked the part where Tonks had green hair and a yellow hat... very appropriate.

I also like the theme in general - it's so like Remus to worry Tonks will be disappointed in him, and so like Tonks to not only understand, but to be exasperated that he thought she wouldn't.

Good job!

shimotsuki February 21 2007, 15:32:23 UTC

Thanks for the encouraging feedback. I'm glad you liked the story.

kerrymdb February 10 2007, 16:31:48 UTC

This was a nice surprise! With your prompt, I was expecting a piece where Remus asks Tonks to marry him. I love the reversal! :)

It works well, too, because Remus could easily misinterpret Tonks words the way he did and bring up his insecurities about his financial situation.

Good job! :)

shimotsuki February 21 2007, 15:32:53 UTC

Hee. I thought this prompt sounded a lot like a proposal too, so I decided it would be fun to try for something different. I'm glad you thought the setup for the misunderstanding worked. Thanks for the comment.

codenamelily February 10 2007, 17:19:09 UTC

I love Tonks' character in this - how she tried so hard to make a beautiful setting for their dinner and the roses were still arranged "haphazardly."

I also love Remus' "A day for green hair, obviously." It's just such a Remus thing to say.

shimotsuki February 21 2007, 15:33:10 UTC

Thanks -- I'm glad you liked those details!

iamweebles February 10 2007, 17:52:07 UTC

"Just say yes, you great prat."

Therein lies the essense of R/T fic :-D

This was very sweet and romantic and I particularly like Thoughtful Tonks in it.

shimotsuki February 21 2007, 15:33:38 UTC

Therein lies the essense of R/T fic :-D

*snort* I hadn't thought about it quite that way, but of course you're right! Thanks for the comment; I'm glad you liked the ficlet.

jncar February 10 2007, 18:36:43 UTC

This is very sweet and in character. I loved the portraits that they wish they could talk to. And Remus idea of copy the poem on pretty paper is perfectly wonderful, but you got it just right that he would still feel unconfident about it.

And Tonks being so thoughtful and romantic herself is great, especially when he's so dumbfounded that she would do that for him, and that he misunderstood her so completely. Love her last line! :)

shimotsuki February 21 2007, 15:34:03 UTC

I'm glad you liked the poem idea. At first I was going to have Remus forget about Valentine's Day altogether, but I realized that he just wouldn't do that -- he has to pay attention to calendars, and anyway he's too thoughtful to forget.